Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Hi Please correct my essay, Thanks a lot,
Nowadays, advertisements have a great impact on our choices. In a high paced world people try to make quick decisions to cope with. As a matter of fact, big companies took that as an advantage. Some individuals do not feel that advertisements affect us. Personally, I believe that they hugely affect my choices. I feel that way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, international companies and vendors these days invest more money on advertisements because they know how important they are. Through tv commercials, publishing magazines, or street advertisement they try to convince customers to buy their products. For instance, take any chain fast food restaurants as an example. Their big posters are all over the streets, tons of commercials on tv channels and social media as well. I once saw how they badly try to make their sandwiches look better and bigger as they put a piece of cardboard between each slice of burger and bread. As a result, a consumer feels that this sandwich that costs less than 5 dollars might be enough for a good meal. On the other hand, in reality the same exact sandwich in fact is half the size.
Furthermore, if I have a business, I will have the same feeling to market my product effectively. For example, I work at a pharmacy as a Technician and our pharmacy owner always advertise about the pharmacy products and services. In addition, in all the advertisements I see that the pharmacy looks wide with a large number of smiley faces to attract much more customers. But on the contrary, the pharmacy is much more narrow in space and my co-workers are not always that happy.
In conclusion, advertisements are a must these days to improve and progress in our career. working intelligently to hire a good advertising designer, is one of the business demands in this millennium that is because they make your product looks more attractive and desirable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, look, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89728096677 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92702629894 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583081570997 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8363470141 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3157894737 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4210526316 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4736842105 5.45110844103 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188803223629 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518811478169 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356679780029 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110654557749 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174654860285 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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