An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
According to the paragraph, it claims that the government of Tagus should promote the new millets to solve the problem of vitamin A dificiency. it might seem resonable to insisit the opinion above using the reasons the author used to support the idea, there are three assumptions that the author made which should be examined to strengthen the idea.
First, the author assumes that people can digest vitamin A in a new millet efficiently, which might not be true. For example, carrots cannot be digested without help of oils, which means that even though a person increases taking of carrots, if the person doesn't take it with proper amount of oil, there isn't much benefit, which means not all the nutrients that people intake can be digested well without help of other material. if it is also the case of vitamin A in the new millet, making people have more new millet will not be beneficial unless people eat it properly.
Secondly, the author assumes that giving farmers subsidies would be enough motivation to maintain the policy. even if the government starts to promote the millet, if there are huge changes to grow new millet compared to traditional millets, farmers choose to reverse to the traditional millets. if it is true, promotions of new millet would not be sufficient policy to combat vitamin A dificiency.
Lastly, there could be other cheaper ways to solve the vitamin A dificiency problem. Since the cost of new millet is higher than the natural millets that the government has to give subsidies to the farmers, if the amount of subsidies is bigger than for example, giving its citizens pills for vitamin A, it would be reasonble to give its citizens pills instead of promoting to change its millet that people have grown into the new one. Therefore we have to compare the cost between other alternative ways to deal with the dificiency problem.
In conclusion, we need to see if increase of vitamin A in the new millet can be digested well that people can experience health benefits, and if there are any other costs that farmers have to pay to grow new millets, and if there are any alternative policies that cost less.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: According to the paragraph, it claims that the government of Tagus should promote the new millets to solve the problem of vitamin A dificiency. it might seem resonable to insisit the opinion above using the reasons the author used to support the idea, there are three assumptions that the author made which should be examined to strengthen the idea.
Error: resonable Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: insisit Suggestion: insist
Error: dificiency Suggestion: deficiency
Sentence: Secondly, the author assumes that giving farmers subsidies would be enough motivation to maintain the policy. even if the government starts to promote the millet, if there are huge changes to grow new millet compared to traditional millets, farmers choose to reverse to the traditional millets. if it is true, promotions of new millet would not be sufficient policy to combat vitamin A dificiency.
Error: dificiency Suggestion: deficiency
Sentence: Lastly, there could be other cheaper ways to solve the vitamin A dificiency problem.
Error: dificiency Suggestion: deficiency
Sentence: Since the cost of new millet is higher than the natural millets that the government has to give subsidies to the farmers, if the amount of subsidies is bigger than for example, giving its citizens pills for vitamin A, it would be reasonble to give its citizens pills instead of promoting to change its millet that people have grown into the new one.
Error: reasonble Suggestion: reasonable
Sentence: Therefore we have to compare the cost between other alternative ways to deal with the dificiency problem.
Error: dificiency Suggestion: deficiency
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1734 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.661 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.418 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 46.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.469 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.875 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.486 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.194 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 145, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ve the problem of vitamin A dificiency. it might seem resonable to insisit the opi...
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Line 2, column 256, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...reases taking of carrots, if the person doesnt take it with proper amount of oil, ther...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 304, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...ake it with proper amount of oil, there isnt much benefit, which means not all the n...
^^^^
Line 2, column 429, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ed well without help of other material. if it is also the case of vitamin A in the...
^^
Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
...ough motivation to maintain the policy. even if the government starts to promote the...
^^^^
Line 3, column 296, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... to reverse to the traditional millets. if it is true, promotions of new millet wo...
^^
Line 4, column 436, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...hat people have grown into the new one. Therefore we have to compare the cost between oth...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ny alternative policies that cost less.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 370.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81351351351 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48910115171 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440540540541 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.356295209 57.8364921388 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.416666667 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8333333333 23.324526521 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58333333333 5.70786347227 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341353879499 0.218282227539 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148261963502 0.0743258471296 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100186045712 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200742078763 0.128457276422 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444329925557 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.21 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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