A controversial debate which is often raised about the sector should the government support. Some group people hold the idea that governments should invest more in athletes. Other groups may take the opposite point and believe that governments should invest in Arts. From my vintage point, I concur with the latter groups and believe that governments should spend more money on arts. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoints through three main reasons.
The exquisite point to be mentioned is that governments investing in arts increase people awareness about about cultures. In fact, people would be visiting more art exhibitions, museums, and, art centers. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above is the investment that the government made to build the cultural fine art building in San Francisco. it is a marvel that every body is visiting to learn about history. Thus, building such a wonderful place has attracted people from all over the world.
The second reason which deserves some attention is the profits the governments gain from investing in such places. In other words, investing in arts could bring financial rewards to the government. For instance, the entrance fees which the government charges for people to get into these art fees. Suppose the government is charging $20 as an entrance fees. then, 1000 visitors each day means that the government is making around $20 000 each day. Thus it is worth the investment.
Although the aforementioned points are the first to ones which cross my mind, they are by no means the only reasons. In fact, There are other subtle point which is worth to be mentioned.The trustworthy, refreshingly, intelligently study which was conducted in my country showed that there is a preference for government to invest in art. This study enrolled people with higher education and from different specialties. Thus its results are fair and not bias.
To wrap up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons one soon realizes that there is so much rewards from governments investing in arts rather than athletes. If it goes in this way then people would not only be interested in arts, but provide additional support to it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, then, thus, for instance, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09016393443 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79158101125 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546448087432 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5797799318 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6818181818 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176097062885 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511882489981 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432076685324 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100647300853 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514582937902 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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