The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author suggest that prohibition of computer use for recreational purpose such as online shopping, gaming will ameliorate working efficiency and profit generation. This is an intriguing idea and sounds reasonable; nonetheless, the recommendation of the vice president does not make a cogent case for the implementation of the proposal. His or her assumptions have many holes and are not strong enough to engender to the prospective effect.
One of the biggest logical flaws of his or her request is restricting the leisure time like online surfing may not result in forwarding working performance. On the contrary, it would add more stress and fatigue on employees, as they lack the channels to extirpate their mental stress. If they are better in the workplace by spending some hours on reading magazines or playing games, as it helps relieve their stress, banning their use of computer may lead to reduced worker's productivity and ultimately profit decrease for company. The corporate should, instead, consider alternative ways to support the environment that employees feel less enervated and can alleviate their mental fatigue.
The other assumption of the argument of the vice president is about the presumption that the working hours are proportionate with working performance. The extrapolation is not particularly true when workers just spend time in working only for a long period in front of computer and they are not exactly working. They may not concentrate on their project and may dissemble that they are doing so.
Also, even though limiting the usage of computer for pastime may force them on the work, but there are other things that they can be diverted, such as mobile phone or having a chat with coworkers. The concept to restrict all the resources which distract workers from their job seems not ideal, as this definitely lacks the willingness of the worker group.
A close examination of all the assumptions made in the argument of the vice president reveals that his or her proposal dose not have enough justification to confining the time of recreation use of computer by workers. Although the claim certainly points out the importance of time management of workers, but it needs to come up with different plans to enhance workers' participitation and working effectiveness.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1898 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.102 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.884 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.873 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.602 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
The author suggest that prohibition of computer use for re...
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Line 3, column 468, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
...eir use of computer may lead to reduced workers productivity and ultimately profit decr...
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Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...proportionate with working performance. The extrapolation is not particularly true ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, nonetheless, so, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22311827957 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95287470336 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559139784946 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.866444995 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.785714286 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5714285714 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0506123781223 0.218282227539 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0196107052025 0.0743258471296 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324304608707 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0296499935489 0.128457276422 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017294593743 0.0628817314937 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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