The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The vice president of human resources recommends implementing electronic monitoring of employee's Internet use by installing particular software to foster employee's productivity and to increase the company's overall profit. This argument seems to be valid at first glance, but when we analyze it in greater detail it is flawed.
First of all, the author assumes that installing software to monitor the employees' internet use will increase the productivity of the employee. However, it is possible that if such software is installed on their computers the employees might feel they not trusted, and controlled. Also, the author failed to mention any surveys ar studies that will show that installing such software were really increases the productivity of employees. Therefore the author should give more evidence for increasing productivity by monitoring software.
Secondly, the author cites that implementing monitoring software will prevent employees from wasting their time and will improve the overall profit of the company. It is possible that the employes might have other ways, such as talking on a private mobile phone, or having their personal laptops with them, if this is the case then it is still possible that they will waste their time by using such devices and installing software will not be profitable move here. Again the overall profit of the company depends on many other factors like the city/country in which the company is operating, customer demand for the products of a company, competitors of the company. The author should give more information about the employees of the company whether they are allowed to carry their laptops or not and the overall condition of the company.
Finally, the author assumes that monitoring their employees will foster a better work ethic at Climpson. However many organizations big and small belive in giving their employees an environment that will keep them free from the burden. For instance, Goggle offers his employees a better environment by proving playgrounds, games in office because this will keep them away from stress so that they should work efficiently. Similarly, many organization allows their employees to work from home, for employees convenience. In contrast, if Clipmson keeps watching on their employees then employees might not feel a better work ethic in Climpson and they may resign from there.
In conclusion, the recommendation is flawed in itself and to strengthen the authors argument author should give more information for increasing productivity of their employees, rules and regulation of the company, overall status of the company in market and measures to improve work ethic at Climpson before taking an decision to install monitoring software in employees computer. Unless the above factors are considered this recommendation might worsen the condition of the company rather than improving.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 451 350
No. of Characters: 2395 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.608 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.31 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.756 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.529 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.966 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.628 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.189 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...nstalling particular software to foster employees productivity and to increase the compan...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 74, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...that installing software to monitor the employees internet use will increase the producti...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 438, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ncreases the productivity of employees. Therefore the author should give more evidence fo...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 106, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...foster a better work ethic at Climpson. However many organizations big and small belive...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 434, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun organization seems to be countable; consider using: 'many organizations'.
Suggestion: many organizations
...hey should work efficiently. Similarly, many organization allows their employees to work from hom...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 17, column 77, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... flawed in itself and to strengthen the authors argument author should give more inform...
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Line 17, column 129, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ment author should give more information for increasing productivity of their emp...
^^
Line 17, column 317, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ve work ethic at Climpson before taking an decision to install monitoring software...
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Line 17, column 383, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Unless” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...itoring software in employees computer. Unless the above factors are considered this r...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2457.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 450.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83548937575 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457777777778 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.0536608956 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.529411765 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4705882353 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1764705882 5.70786347227 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190228450166 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802681532732 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647609874813 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135280003764 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673350771064 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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