International tourism is now the world’s largest industry. Unfortunately, this creates tension rather than understanding the culture of other people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, tourism is the most beneficial business in the entire world, but it creates a dispute about cultural understanding. I disagree with this opinion because the visitors can wipe the native’s original culture and it can turn people’s conduct and behaviour.
Tourism, as the newcomers, they have another culture which is different and can change our cultural identity. The new culture that they bought contains a lot of bad things which can change our culture to identify. The new culture that they brought contain a lot of bad things which can change our habit, such as using Bra in the public are which is not our habit as an Indonesian, and too much speaking in their language for something inappropriate, and it can remove our native language slowly.
Visitors, also have bad consequences for changing people’s behaviour. The negative behaviour that brought by them, can make tension with that since their behaviour changing people’s conduct which is not good for people to consume it. If there is something peculiar for us and the children will be curious about that, so they try to imitate it as their new habit which is not good for them. For example, a boy who always sees the foreigners kissing on the beach will try to imply it to his friends. Based on research from the University of Pare, a child who always curious to imitate foreigner’s conduct will wipe out their personal identify and grow up as an unwell behaviour teenager which is not good for them.
As a result, we have to be more selective to the foreigners, since they make a tension, they also bring a bad effect for our future generation
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1370.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89285714286 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78919196843 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510714285714 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.9633882681 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.545454545 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0953788251119 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502651085784 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467111962662 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0746233519825 0.151304729494 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673287337943 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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