people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are best at or that they find the most interesting
People’s opinions differ as to whether youngsters should focus on a range of disciplines. While I accept the idea that learning all the subjects offered by schools has some certain advantages in terms of future jobs, I believe that it is more necessary for the young to pay attention to their favorite subjects.
it is undeniable that a country’s educational program is based on the job requirements of this nation. To make sure the outcomes, schools have to offer courses that employers need from candidates. As a result, following the educational curriculums give students more opportunities to get a job. In Vietnam, for example, there is a shortage of aviation workers, so the government establishes several aviation schools so that students will find it easier to seek a job after graduation.
On the other hand, benefits are greater for students when studying what they love to. Initially, they will have more precious time to widen their knowledge of the area they are interested in if a range of subjects is mitigated. Moreover, students can be able to excel in their fields and score high marks in graduation. For instance, in Finland, students have the right to choose their own subjects and they are considered to be at the top of the world class for years. Finally, being comfortable in their study is worth mentioning as school time in some parts of the world is becoming more stressful today.
In conclusion, concentrating on all school subjects can help graduates enter straight to job markets after leaving schools. However, it seems to me that students should be accepted to choose topics they are best at that is better for them to do their best.
- The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 84
- New technologies have changed the way children spend their time. Do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? 89
- The charts below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant 85
- Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. 73
- “Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns as it increases the crime and violence in the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?” 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
People's opinions differ as to whether youngsters should focus on a range of d...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ention to their favorite subjects. it is undeniable that a country's edu...
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Line 4, column 397, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aviation seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some aviation'.
Suggestion: some aviation
... workers, so the government establishes several aviation schools so that students will find it e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, moreover, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00709219858 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87356597618 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567375886525 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3222161938 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.615384615 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38461538462 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240343238629 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751423707549 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0606830158654 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145498147028 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709462842292 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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