The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
For any field such as government, industries etc., leader has great role to guide and lead the institutions toward right and successful directions. The prompt claim that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in any field is by encouraging them a sense of cooperation rather than competition. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the suggestion and argue that cooperation is the essential character that is required for any leader.
To begin, competition is a kind of thing that divide us and various hatred things are evolved. For instance, a poor country which is struggling in the economy and the people in this are suffering from severeness results due to poor economy. Then, the competition for survival in such scenario will surely lead violence and can may cause huge casualties. Leader in such country is cooperative then he will request his country people to cooperate in such difficult scenario which surely can motivate people and reduce possible casualties.
Secondly, leaders having cooperative character will surely benefit him to attract more followers and support from them. His vision of success will only get fufil when he gets support from his follower otherwise it is impossible to grasp success though how better leader you are. For instance, the ex-president of America President Barack Obama, his character of being humble and very friendly towards his supporter leads him to become the most favorite president for people.
In conclusion, some might argue that competition will lead us to become the leader after defeating other candidate. However, it is compulsion to defeat other people to become candidate, you can win their heart through cooperative character and can withhold the leader position
- Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.Write a response in which you disc 50
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 50
- Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.Write a response in which you disc 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1483.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 283.0 442.535393258 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24028268551 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75225324526 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572438162544 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4132434269 60.3974514979 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 123.583333333 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 5.21951772744 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243585161235 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949370562546 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148825010617 0.0758088955206 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149157272253 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147744682693 0.0667264976115 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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