Hospital statistics regarding people who go to the emergency room after roller-skating accidents indicate the need for more protective equipment. Within this group of people, 75 percent of those who had accidents in streets or parking lots were not wearing any protective clothing (helmets, knee pads, etc.) or any light-reflecting material (clip-on lights, glow-in-the-dark wrist pads, etc.). Clearly, these statistics indicate that by investing in high-quality protective gear and reflective equipment, roller skaters will greatly reduce their risk of being severely injured in an accident.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The topic was about the people got into roller-skating accidents need more high-quality gear to reduce the accident risk. The argument is based on unwarranted reasons and flawed for the following reasons.
First of all, author claim that 75 percent accidents on the streets and parking lots do not have proper protective equipment, even though the author does not provide any proper survey data or the actual number of accidents. the author's claim poses a question that did other 25 percent of people have proper protection? if they have, how did they injured or even despite proper protection they avoid accidents. it might be possible that the accidents happen at the streets or parking lots because of the car accidents or the roller skater bumped into the pedestrians.
The author also claimed that the roller-skaters need light-reflecting materials like glow-in-the-dark wrist pads and high-quality protective material to prevent accidents. But, does light-reflecting and protective materials are sufficient to prevent accidents by cars or other accidents. The author does not provide any survey or data that provide that same theory implemented before in some cases and was successful. it might be possible that the accidents happened because skaters do not have a place to roller-skating and they practice in at the streets and parking lots where they accidents with cars or people, or maybe roller skaters do not have a lane and break the traffic rules.
The following argument is flawed and based on unwarranted reasons, and failed to convinced that protective or light-reflecting wearing is sufficient to prevent the accidents.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 261 350
No. of Characters: 1358 1500
No. of Different Words: 120 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.019 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.203 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.943 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.519 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.455 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.709 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 224, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...data or the actual number of accidents. the authors claim poses a question that did...
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Line 2, column 319, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...rcent of people have proper protection? if they have, how did they injured or even...
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Line 2, column 410, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...proper protection they avoid accidents. it might be possible that the accidents ha...
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Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...efore in some cases and was successful. it might be possible that the accidents ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, first of all, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 55.5748502994 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 260.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32692307692 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05297168259 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 204.123752495 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476923076923 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.880184693 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.909090909 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6363636364 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22314542283 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899912685902 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702456977507 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135402043369 0.128457276422 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678228004265 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 98.500998004 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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