TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task

The reading and lecture both discuss using the burning mirror as weapons by ancient Greek. While the reading provides three reasons to support that Greek did not use burning mirror as weapons, the professor refutes, saying none of these are convincing.

Firstly, the reading avers that the ancient Greek did not have advanced technology to build long copper sheet. So, the ancient people did not use the burning mirror as weapons tool. However, the professor argues this notion by saying that there is no need for single long sheet to use the burning mirror, but they can use small flat copper sheet to build long mirror. Furthermore, they can direct many small copper sheets to make big one.

Secondly, the article mentions that it takes long time like ten minutes to to put the ship in fire. Also, the ship should not be in moving position and it is completely impractical. On the other hand, the professor questions this idea by pointing out that about how long it takes to get the ship in fire in not true. In fact, they assumed that sitting the wood of ship in fire takes ten minutes, but there is other materials. For instance, there is sealing materials between the wood which is sticky water proof materials called bitch. Moreover, the fire can catch these substances very quick and the fire can spread so easily to the ship even though these ships moving.

Lastly, the reading states that the ancient Greek already had the fire arrows. So, there was not any need to build the weapons burning mirrors. Nevertheless, the professor contradicts this idea by explaining that the Roman solider were familer with the fire arrows. On the other hand, they can not see the burning that raises from the mirror. Consequently, the solders's ships will get into fire suddenly. As a result, the burning mirror is more effective than the flaming arrows.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t have advanced technology to build long copper sheet. So, the ancient people did...
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Line 5, column 73, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...hat it takes long time like ten minutes to to put the ship in fire. Also, the ship sh...
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Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are other materials'?
Suggestion: there are other materials
... of ship in fire takes ten minutes, but there is other materials. For instance, there is sealing materia...
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Line 5, column 501, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: waterproof
...erials between the wood which is sticky water proof materials called bitch. Moreover, the ...
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Line 5, column 512, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...een the wood which is sticky water proof materials called bitch. Moreover, the fi...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, lastly, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in fact, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 1373.03311258 112% => OK
No of words: 319.0 270.72406181 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81504702194 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26129868931 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504702194357 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 453.6 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9595347436 49.2860985944 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3333333333 110.228320801 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7222222222 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 7.06452816374 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 4.45695364238 269% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377687533097 0.272083759551 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123578707665 0.0996497079465 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623488767901 0.0662205650399 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231715428101 0.162205337803 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565524927475 0.0443174109184 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.3589403974 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 53.8541721854 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.0289183223 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 12.2367328918 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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