TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of the doubt advertisements play a vital role in introducing new products to community. Companies by spending money in the market of adverticement can persuade people to by these stuff. Some prople contend that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are, while others assert it is not true. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that advertisements are very influential in making products look like better than they really are. In theensuing lines, I delve into my reasons to substantiate my point.
The first an possibily the paramount reason is that advertisement companies use fancy items, famous actors, and even cartoon characters to introduce the products. Most of the time, if people are interested in these actors or characters, they will absorb to by these products. So, the more money you spend in advertising your product, the greater customers you will have. As a result, advertisements are a key to companies.
Another point springing to the mind is that there is apossibility that kids and teenaager watch these advertisement. Furthermore, advertisemen companies use fictional items in their progframs to make them eye-catching. So, kids and teenager cannot distinguish between the reality and fiction. As a result, they think these stuff are useful things but they are not. For example, last day I saw an advertisement in the television about candies which are very harmful for children. They cause bad effects in chidren's tooth. This advertisement was full of fairy tails and my kid really like those tiny fairy tails. It was too hard for me to explain that candies could cause serious damage. Consequently, advertisements are just used to making money and most of the time the products are not valuable things.
To sum it all up, it is easy to see that advertisement companies use various elements to make their advertisements nicer and also kids cannot understand that these products are not good things to buu them. Therefore, these advertisement are just tools to absorb people and make more money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 11, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ns to substantiate my point. The first an possibily the paramount reason is that ...
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advertisement' or 'these advertisements'?
Suggestion: this advertisement; these advertisements
...ssibility that kids and teenaager watch these advertisement. Furthermore, advertisemen companies us...
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Line 4, column 217, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advertisement' or 'these advertisements'?
Suggestion: this advertisement; these advertisements
...not good things to buu them. Therefore, these advertisement are just tools to absorb people and mak...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, look, really, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12256267409 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00045387276 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565459610028 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6946394252 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5714285714 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0952380952 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21868217052 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623320945913 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678726725428 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138261271874 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544353121586 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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