The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think this is due to problems such as the growing number of fast food outlets. Others believe that parents are to blame for not looking after their children's health. To what extent do you agree with these views?
According to medical experts, it is true that the rate of children in wealthy countries that are suffering from obesity, is rising rapidly. These days, children tend to gain weight faster than children in the past. From my everyday experience and observation, I attach that there are a bunch of reasons for this problem.
First of all, the rapid growth of shops selling unhealthy and fatty food such as fried chickens, chips, coke,etc has affected badly to people’s health. Take-away food seems to be the best seller in the human’s menu because of its own appetite and cheapness in many developed countries. A lot of adults have created a lazy habit that they never cook a meal for themselves. If there were fewer fast food outlets and the food cost more money just like in Viet Nam, people would not be tempted to spend money on trunk food.
Second of all, I totally agree that parents play an essential role in taking care of their children’s health. Many parents allow their children to become obese by taking away the good eating habit. Good eating habit is formed early in life when people were just babies. If children are given unhealthy food rather than nourishing food, or are always allowed to choose what they want to eat, they will go for the sweet and salty foods every time, and bad eating habit will carry on throughout their lives.
Last but not least, by the blooming of the technological era, children are spending their time on television, video games, etc instead of exercising. This has contributed to the problem and made it worse. Scientists say that without exercising, the human’s life span will be decreased. To solve this problem, children should be encouraged to outside and do some outdoor activities.
To sum up, parents should train their children to have a good eating habit at an early age and encourage them to be active. Besides, fast food outlets should be decrease and trunk food should cost more money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'bunches'?
Suggestion: bunches
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Suggestion: , etc
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Message: Did you mean 'decreased'?
Suggestion: decreased
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, second, so, such as, first of all, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85416666667 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51225560346 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595238095238 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3998922764 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9411764706 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253532397006 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808477458874 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374685641175 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137430975459 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206524806615 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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