Imagine that you are planning to take a vacation and are trying to decide between two places to visit. Which of these two options do you believe would give you better information about making your choice? Why? ۱٫ Reading about the places online
۲٫ Discussing them with someone you know who has visited both places
In the modern era, travel has played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, many people have always searched for ways of selecting the best destination. Some people may hold the view that searching on the internet is the best way of finding proper information. However, some others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that asking people who visite the destination have positive points than using the internet. I contend that searching on the internet is better than asking from a traveller. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
First of all, an important reason why finding information from word wide web is better than people is that people can find much information on the internet. To elaborate on my point, when a person searches a topic on the internet, many pages are opened. These pages show adequate information so that a person can find different information at the same time. Also, if they have questions, they can find answer all their question by searching on the net. I believe that searching on the net is time-consuming. People would find a lot of information such as distance between the cities, the weather condition, sightseeing, picture of a city and many other situations, by spending a few time. But, if people want to ask travellers, they may spend many times for finding people and then ask them questions.
Another reason is, if ask a question from people who travelled to the destination, they would not give correct information. To shed more light on this matter, individuals answer a question only from their viewpoints. In this situation, they consider their experience of travelling to the destination city. If they have a positive and pleaser memory, they would say a positive point of the city. But, if they have negative or demerits memories, they would say a negative point of the city. Therefore, people could not adequate reference for finding the correct information. In other words, when people try to find information from the net, they can analysis every viewpoint such as negative and positive views. As a result, they make the best decision about their travels.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I believe that it is better to find proper information is using the internet. The internet not only can save time but also can find many sources and site for choosing a better decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 682, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'few times'.
Suggestion: few times
...nd many other situations, by spending a few time. But, if people want to ask travellers,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01466992665 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79173068184 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474327628362 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6250480995 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1739130435 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7826086957 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.073222645648 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0255742028098 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0273192530883 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0486847094414 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0106988843502 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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