Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by xmen1404 on Thu, 07/18/2019 - 10:54

Living satisfactory has attracted much social concern. Some people believe that, because the world altering so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Personally, I strongly disagree with the belief.

On the one hand, what has been put under consideration is personal enjoyment. The fact is that the world moving quickly goes along with the fast increasing of social services for entertainment. Therefore, it is possible for people to have a variety of options for relaxing. As a result, they are supposed to easily spend time on hanging out to refresh themselves. Consequently, the fast enhancing of community plays a crucial role in stimulating the satisfactory of people. More importantly, it cannot be denied that with the fast development of the world, people possess a large probability to be provided with many modern technologies. It leads to a fact that there is a likelihood for them to easily communicate with many other people around or even in faraway areas. On that ground, needless to say, it is able for people to interact with each other easily and express their thoughts about everything in the life. As a consequence, People are certain to be filled with happiness. By and large, it is highly likely that the improvement of society actually amuse people in many ways.

On the other hand, it is claimed that fast changing of the world forces people to live in an environment that working and studying requirements are too high. Accordingly, it sets extreme stresses on people. However, it is just applicable to a minority. It is widely known that every employee or student is always given appropriate amount of tasks. Hence, they can schedule everything effectively and put them under control. Furthermore, by the quick development of society, people stand a golden chance to confront many varied circumstances and difficulties. Correspondingly, it is apparent that they tend to reflect themselves from different sides. For this reason, it encourage them to gradually be aware of their strengths and weaknesses. This, in turn, forms a significant contribution to making progress in perfecting themselves and gain many successes in their career. Subsequently, it is more easy for people to acquire satisfactory feelings. Beyond any doubt, the idea that modern world make people extremely stressed is possible end in collapse.

All the factors mentioned above are evidence supporting my disagreement. It is strongly recommended that everyone should take my writing into careful consideration in order to make an suitable decision on understanding the world.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'encourages'?
Suggestion: encourages
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... careful consideration in order to make an suitable decision on understanding the ...
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Line 7, column 231, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le decision on understanding the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, as a result, by and large, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23820754717 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04105112511 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561320754717 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2618884811 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4230769231 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3076923077 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15384615385 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31138857604 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697420507466 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106316443916 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206814123446 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.179008816245 0.0645574589148 277% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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