The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Batavia newspaper.
"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure fair prices for consumers."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of the recommendation suggest that the Bataian diary farmers have increased by some percentage over past ten years, but since a local market have increased their prices for milk in the same time period, the government should regulate the milk prices to reduce excessive profits on the farmers and to provide the consumers with a fair price. The argument in a superficial level would appeal to the unattentive reader as a reasonable argument. The argument is seemingly intuitive in the sense that an increased supply of a product should generally result in an decreased supply of sales prices, and since this have not happened, customers are at a loss. However, the critical peruser of the argument would reaveal that the argument is rife woth holes and ommissions, without which the recommendation along with its suggested results cannot be evaluated in a satisfactory manner. The critical analyser would have some queries, answers to which would shed some light into the underlying assumptions of the author and their validity, hence clarifying the arguement and evaluating the suggested results.
The author suggest that there is a twent five percent increase in number of diary farmers in the country. this suggest an increase in a superficial level, but a more direct quantitative value would bolster enlightment. For example, if the number of farmers before 10 years were a very small number like 100, a 25 percent increase would not suggest a significant increase of milk supply, if the population of Batavia is comparatively large. In such a scenario, regulation of prices would be an unjust burden on the diary farmers, which would discourage them from the proffesion, which would ultimately rsult in increased prices as opposed to the suggested outcome of the recommendation by the author.
The author then states that a specific local store have increased the price of milk. A worthwhile question to ask would be, is this increase a more general situation, or just specific to the local market mentioned; Excello Food market. A regulatory action acted upong milk prices in general would strike all the other markets as an unjust verdict. this would result in reduced milk selling in markets, which would in turn further increase the market prices of milk in the few that would continue selling, which is contradicting the authors original conclusion.
When looking from a different perspective, there might have been new regulations imposing on the quality on the diary milk production. In such a situation, despite the increased candidates in the supply side, increased manufacturing costs might have resulted in ultimately increased selling price. applying regulatory prices in such a case, needless to say to a free market price, farmers would be frustrated as they would fail to cover their manufacturing costs. farmers abondaing the profession due to lack of profitability would ultimately increase the milk prices, let along decreasing.
Despite special increased manufacturing costs, natural inflation maight also have affected this phenomenon. applying regulations for a free market price inflated due to normal inflation, would again be deem to be unjust and wrongly punative. this would reep the similar outcomes contradictory to the one that the author suggest.
The author in his recommendation have overlooked several factors that are crucial on the matter, before arriveing at a conclusion. The underlying assumptions of the argument used by the author are weak and need some clarification to be reasonable. The queries mentioned above would help clarify the validity of the argument, and hence would help evaluate the final outcome suggested more accuratey.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The argument in a superficial level would appeal to the unattentive reader as a reasonable argument.
Error: unattentive Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: However, the critical peruser of the argument would reaveal that the argument is rife woth holes and ommissions, without which the recommendation along with its suggested results cannot be evaluated in a satisfactory manner.
Error: ommissions Suggestion: commissions
Error: rife Suggestion: rise
Error: woth Suggestion: worth
Error: reaveal Suggestion: reveal
Sentence: The critical analyser would have some queries, answers to which would shed some light into the underlying assumptions of the author and their validity, hence clarifying the arguement and evaluating the suggested results.
Error: analyser Suggestion: analyses
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: The author suggest that there is a twent five percent increase in number of diary farmers in the country. this suggest an increase in a superficial level, but a more direct quantitative value would bolster enlightment.
Error: enlightment Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: twent Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In such a scenario, regulation of prices would be an unjust burden on the diary farmers, which would discourage them from the proffesion, which would ultimately rsult in increased prices as opposed to the suggested outcome of the recommendation by the author.
Error: proffesion Suggestion: profession
Error: rsult Suggestion: result
Sentence: A regulatory action acted upong milk prices in general would strike all the other markets as an unjust verdict. this would result in reduced milk selling in markets, which would in turn further increase the market prices of milk in the few that would continue selling, which is contradicting the authors original conclusion.
Error: upong Suggestion: upon
Sentence: In such a situation, despite the increased candidates in the supply side, increased manufacturing costs might have resulted in ultimately increased selling price. applying regulatory prices in such a case, needless to say to a free market price, farmers would be frustrated as they would fail to cover their manufacturing costs. farmers abondaing the profession due to lack of profitability would ultimately increase the milk prices, let along decreasing.
Error: abondaing Suggestion: abounding
Sentence: Despite special increased manufacturing costs, natural inflation maight also have affected this phenomenon. applying regulations for a free market price inflated due to normal inflation, would again be deem to be unjust and wrongly punative. this would reep the similar outcomes contradictory to the one that the author suggest.
Error: punative Suggestion: punitive
Error: reep Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: maight Suggestion: might
Sentence: The author in his recommendation have overlooked several factors that are crucial on the matter, before arriveing at a conclusion.
Error: arriveing Suggestion: arriving
Sentence: The queries mentioned above would help clarify the validity of the argument, and hence would help evaluate the final outcome suggested more accuratey.
Error: accuratey Suggestion: accurate
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 18 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 588 350
No. of Characters: 3048 1500
No. of Different Words: 251 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.924 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.184 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.829 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 232 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 179 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 121 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 84 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.332 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.623 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...entive reader as a reasonable argument. The argument is seemingly intuitive in the ...
^^^
Line 1, column 568, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...of a product should generally result in an decreased supply of sales prices, and s...
^^
Line 1, column 863, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a satisfactory manner" with adverb for "satisfactory"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...s suggested results cannot be evaluated in a satisfactory manner. The critical analyser would have some ...
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Line 2, column 12, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...ting the suggested results. The author suggest that there is a twent five percent incr...
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Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...number of diary farmers in the country. this suggest an increase in a superficial le...
^^^^
Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...the other markets as an unjust verdict. this would result in reduced milk selling in...
^^^^
Line 4, column 298, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Applying
... in ultimately increased selling price. applying regulatory prices in such a case, needl...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 464, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Farmers
...ail to cover their manufacturing costs. farmers abondaing the profession due to lack of...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 108, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Applying
...ght also have affected this phenomenon. applying regulations for a free market price inf...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 242, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...deem to be unjust and wrongly punative. this would reep the similar outcomes contrad...
^^^^
Line 6, column 248, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ed some clarification to be reasonable. The queries mentioned above would help clar...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, so, then, while, for example, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.9520958084 208% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3111.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 588.0 441.139720559 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29081632653 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9242980521 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90229696351 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 204.123752495 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459183673469 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 981.9 705.55239521 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.8243098911 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.260869565 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5652173913 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.34782608696 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0409305556824 0.218282227539 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0162433297267 0.0743258471296 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327954225477 0.0701772020484 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0252386631737 0.128457276422 20% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030714259624 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 98.500998004 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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