The destruction of animal and plant habitats in order to modernize the city has lead to the decrease of many animals and plants species. According to some people, this is considered as the most crucial environmental problem. However, problems like air pollution and waste disposal are considered as more important environmental problems for other people. I personally agree with the second view, since it has direct effects to human's life.
In this modern day, city is full of high buildings and skyscrapers. Every year, there are many construction projects led by investors to build modern buildings like offices, hotels, and apartments. Sadly, these activity have sacrificed the existence of some plants and animals species. The need of space requires those people to demolish lot of animals and plants habitats that make those creatures lost their living places. Some people argue that this is the most crucial environmental problem because animals and plants are included in our food chain. So, when some creatures are removed from the food chain, it will become imbalance and will have negative impact to other creatures including human. Consider an example, where rabbits usually consume grasses, and snakes will prey on rabbits. If grass does not exist anymore in the food chain, rabbits will lose their food supply, which also lead to the extinction of snakes. This will make the food chain imbalance and will effect the whole environment too.
On the other hand, other environmental problems are also important. Air pollution and waste disposal are the examples. Nowadays, cars and motorcycles are used everywhere, that cause the city to be polluted by dangerous chemical gases. Furthermore, lot of people often smoking in any place, causing more pollution to the air. Besides that, problem with waste is also exist. Many people still have bad habits in disposing waste, where they used to throw their wastes anywhere they want. These problems are very crucial environmental problems, as it will have worse effects to people. Take an example, where all places in a city is polluted by smokes and wastes. Of course, many inhabitants of that city will have health problems, ranging from cough, diarrhea, to dangerous disease like bronchitis. These are very crucial since it will directly impact people's life.
In conclusion, although many others may have different opinions, I personally agree with the second view, that there are many other environmental problems that are more crucial than the loss of plants and animals. Those problems are more dangerous because it will directly affect human's life.
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Please help me to increase my
Please help me to increase my task-2 writing score..any comments or reviews will be really appreciated...thank you
God bless you
The essay is wordy, look:
The essay is wordy, look:
No of words: 419
Unique words: 204
Unique words percentage: 0.486873508353 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
normally, it only need about 300-350 words for essay content. but need more unique words.
thank you !! any other
thank you !! any other comment? I feel that writing task 2 is very hard to do..
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this activity' or 'these activities'?
Suggestion: this activity; these activities
...offices, hotels, and apartments. Sadly, these activity have sacrificed the existence of some p...
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Line 3, column 978, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
... make the food chain imbalance and will effect the whole environment too. On the ot...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...esides that, problem with waste is also exist. Many people still have bad habits in d...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, still, in conclusion, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2200.0 1615.20841683 136% => OK
No of words: 419.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25059665871 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57134846417 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486873508353 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.9 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4883762313 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.76 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 3.9879759519 426% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209381638846 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647383961933 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718671049514 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156701100767 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476962717939 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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