do you agree or disagree? young people are more influenced by celebrities more than older people?
Since the beginning of the last decade, our society has become very influenced with celebrities. Some people believe that older people are more influenced than younger one however, there is a substantial body of evidence that casts doubts on that beliefs. From a personal perspective, younger people can be influenced easily by celebrities than older people. Because; firstly, young access the web sites. Secondly, most celebrities are young. Finally, young people are naïve. Below I will strive my supporting points in more details.
The first and the foremost point, young people have accessibility to the internet more than older people. Moreover, all teenagers who access the web have social media accounts, either on Facebook, Twitter, or Instagram. To put it in another way, they can follow celebrities’ accountes. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above is, youth in Egypt are interesting in the famous singer Amer Diab. During the previous presidential election in 2015, he supported Abdel Fatah El-sisi, likewise all his fans voted for the same candidate. However, older people did not affect by his point of view because they do not follow his account. Consequently, younger people are more affected by the celebrities point of views.
Next, coupled with social media, youth is another reason that young people are more influenced by famous people. In another way, youth usually are affected by people fall in their own age. For example, the Liverpool footballer Mohamed Salah is an icon and role model for many youths, given that he embodies the ideal of a young person who has achieved his dream. Therefore, younger people are more care about celebrities than older people.
Although the previous reason are the first one who cross the mind at a glance, they are not the only reasons available. There is another subtle point that must be born in mind. Given that, the youth are naïve to the reality of the world, they are more susceptible to the influence of other. One the other hand, older people believe that they are wise enough to trust their own point of view. A survey done by the psychological department in University Of Toronto found that, older people in Canada are not affected by the celebrities’ political and economical point of views. They think that they have lived more in the world, so they have more experience. As a result, entertainers’ thoughts are not important to older people.
Taking everything into consideration; without a doubt, teenagers are more influenced by famous people. It is suggested that parents teach their kids to be influenced only with the positive site of celebrities’ life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11818181818 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80502427031 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504545454545 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0418872453 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4074074074 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2962962963 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424387371101 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126098152673 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112544408946 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262816421229 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103650740132 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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