There is no shortage of debate about new generation’s impact on society. Some people think that they give sufficient support to their society. Other people, however, argue that they have not got enough time to do this job. In my opinion, I completely agree with the idea that today’s people have not enough time to assist their society. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Firstly, there are not enough conditions for young people to help their community. This is because that they have many responsibilities in their universities, so they could not think about society. My friend Rauf ’s experience is compelling example of it. In the past, he had much leisure time, and we can spend our time together. After starting university life, he has not spare time to meet his friends. He has many works to do such as writing essays, preparing exams, making reports of studies. Additionally, Rauf must deal with his music club in the campus, in which he is boss of students. As a result, Rauf could not take a time to assist a community.
Secondly, the majority of the young people seem to show less enthusiasm towards their community. This is obvious that they think their own personal success now than the young did in the last century. My own country’s people are these types of person. In the last century, people in my country tend to development of our community. But now, the young take care of their individual life. They think their own improvement of lifestyle without thinking that it could hurt some people. Additionally, they could do some injustices to other people for their purpose of comfort life. Therefore, they do not mind community of our country, so this irritates people who want improvement of society.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the young people do not attend to their societies now than they did in the past. This is because that they have many works to do in the university. Also, the perspective of young person completely changed if we look society in the last century. Nowadays people only focus on their individuality, so they do not care about people on their communities
- Tpo 28- integrated writing 68
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?“Overall, the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today's world." Use reasons and details to support your opinion. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 80
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85790884718 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74001196125 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487935656836 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.846750383 48.9658058833 38% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.48 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.92 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0075508301528 0.236089414692 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00281219683458 0.076458572812 4% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.013776894602 0.0737576698707 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00530074046456 0.150856017488 4% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00918115180235 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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