There is no shortage of debates whether people might know about changes in the world which do not influence to their lives. Personally, I believe that people must follow the changes in the world because of some advantages. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, individuals would expand their outlook by being aware of events without depending on the work individuals do. This is because that people would have knowledge in fields which do not affect their daily life. My friend Ali’s experience is compelling example of this. About four years ago, Ali began studying university, but he could not communicate with other students. Ali had a sophisticated thoughts and reactions to happening compared with those of his peers. These thoughts excelled him to a leader of group in the university. Additionally, professors considered Ali the excellent student in a class, so they help Ali to get in the top universities for studying master degree. As a result, Ali works on the brand holding now and obtains the good salary, which means the comfortable life for him.
Secondly, listening to the news is very important to be updated about what happen in another part of the world. This is obvious that we are able to predict the future and change the situation for our benefits by following the incidents in the world. For example, my uncle is the dentist in a big hospital, but he always follows economic changes and thinks how to take advantage from them. Last year, my uncle started studying online investment program, Forex, to make additional money. He mastered all the skills to benefit from this site, and now he gives seminars to students in university, who studies economic faculty. Additionally, my uncle creates his own business and enlarges his budget to increase this type of business. As a result, my uncle’s interest to economic incidents around the world assisted him to be the best entrepreneur in our country.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people must follow the events around the world, even though it does not affect their diurnal life. This is because that they would increase their point of view and look events from different angles. Also, people can predict future changes and profit from them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 53, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...shortage of debates whether people might know about changes in the world which do...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98181818182 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64125833129 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563636363636 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.5500930769 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.3333333333 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190897287318 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517470656126 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618727926938 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115963095113 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417333322286 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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