Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches.

Submitted by Ying_chen on Mon, 08/19/2019 - 12:25

Some advocates claim that the students should suspend schooling for broadening themselves before they start the college.

First of all, there are abundance advantages of having a gap year before the university. In general, people are confused about what major to choose, which could be irrelevant to their future career. Furthermore, lock of the abilities of team works and communicating skills are also harmful the achievement in college. Therefore, spending years to work or travel not only increase the opportunities to find out what people exactly desire for, but also broaden their horizons. For example, those students in university will grow the chances to obtain diversity aspects of view from others who experience the same in classes. On the contrary, the points of the high school graduates are unvaried, according to their school lives.

On the other hand, it is unusual in our conservative society due to peers pressure and family expectations. In other words, if a person wants to postpone his permission from school, he has to deal with the spiritual stress from their parents and friends. What is worse, the person might be force to give it up and stay with his family by financial supported. In addition, the job opportunities will possibly not match up with the expectation, while the person only graduated from high school.

In my point of view, I believe that spending a gap year to take adventures is one of the methods to be mature and independent of the attitude in life, whereas the pressure from either families or peers are also considerable concern that have to handle seriously.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 264, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... concern that have to handle seriously.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, whereas, while, as to, for example, in addition, in general, first of all, in other words, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1352.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08270676692 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77323363718 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62030075188 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7841929874 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.666666667 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.5833333333 7.06120827912 207% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146230945826 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544479873493 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496158059744 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0838628376743 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634590202907 0.056905535591 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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