Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Although we live in a peaceful world, wars are still happening in some countries. While air could be fresh in our own country, there is severe air pollution in other areas. From my point of view, these events, though may not appear in our daily life, also need attaching great importance.
To begin with, every event can teach us solutions to the problem. Even though some events seem unlikely to happen and will not exert great impacts on our daily life, the methods could be incredibly meaningful when we meet with the same kind of problems. For instance, last year a factory in Japan exploded as a result of the dangerous chemicals, leading to large pollution to the sea. Although the sea between Japan and China can prevent the pollution from impacting seafood near China, we'd better clearly know why this explosion happened and how to avoid this kind of event in Chinese factories. Hence, what renders those events important to us is not the event itself, but the measures taken in addressing the problem.
In addition, although those events might not affect our daily life, they could significantly influence the whole society in future. Because some influence is invisible and in the long term it could considerably influence our living. For example, the reason why wars are happending around eastern Asia is that there is abundant gasoline in those countries. As is known to us all, gasoline can be extremely precious in that they cannot be produced by techniques. In order to solve this matter, deals need to be made fairly and every country can benefit from the contracts of gasoline. If we successfully get to know the skills of making deals in this event, we can also profit a lot in our own work.
Furthermore, some events might not benefit us or affect us, but they could influence our offsprings. We are supposed to protect the earth to give our children a promising future. Private cars emit carbon dioxide which may jeopardize the ozone. Thus, when elctronic cars have been invented and utilized in other countries, we'd better pay much attention to those cars which use only electricity instead of petrol and will not give out air pollution. For the future development, it is selfish that we destroy the environment. Instead, we should concentrate on the future influence, especially for our offsprings.
All in all, events that don't necessarily happen may seem unimportant to some people, but it is crucial for us to know about them because we can get useful solutions from them. Importantly, we have to provide our children a better environment using advanced skills and techniques.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'we'd'?
Suggestion: we'd
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...gnificantly influence the whole society in future. Because some influence is invisible an...
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Message: Did you mean 'we'd'?
Suggestion: we'd
...vented and utilized in other countries, wed better pay much attention to those cars...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... offsprings. All in all, events that dont necessarily happen may seem unimportant...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, still, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92743764172 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62241148054 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4738790642 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7727272727 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0454545455 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150667202941 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430410474024 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044563306439 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0860997368443 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354711107402 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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