The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and
concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village
rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children
living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more
time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This
research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid
and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying culturesis invalid as well. The
interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will
establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other
island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The assumption stated by Dr Krapp in this paragraph allow him to invalidd the previous conclusion
made by Dr Field. While we do not have a lot of information to attest the validity or not of Dr Field
assumptions, we think that the way Dr krapp stated his conclusion suffer of some authenticities.
First, there is no any information about the differents questions that have been asked to the children
of the island.May be in the survey or questionnaire there is a yes or no question without any details.
If the questions were more detailed it may help the children a more concise ansxer and by the may
give a more accurate answer.
Second, the two survey have been done in different period.So it can be difficult to comprare the two
results. Also, there is no proove that both of them discuss with the same children set or if the
children they talked to where representative of the population. Moreover, talking more about there
biological parents than other adults of the village does not necessary mean that they were reared by
their parent than other adult of the village. This actually is not suffiicent to contradict the conclusion
made by Dr Field.
Moreover, it is not because the conclusion of a reseach is invalid that the method that has been used
is not also accurate. Actually, the method can be the best one and due to certain mistake of
computation the results become invalid.In other to state the inadaptivity of Dr Field method, Dr
Krapp should consider all the reseach process.
Add, there is not sufficent information on the interview centered method used by Dr Karp.The way
the method is shaped is not define as well as the type of population it has been applied too.
To sum up , the assumption made by Dr Karp according to which the observation centered method
used by Dr Field is invalid can not be accepted as presented in condition that more details have been
given to both reasearchers technics.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1553 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.568 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.659 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 12.593 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.166 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.481 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.264 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.88 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 22 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... him to invalidd the previous conclusion made by Dr Field. While we do not have a...
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... to invalidd the previous conclusion made by Dr Field. While we do not have a lot...
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...o attest the validity or not of Dr Field assumptions, we think that the way Dr kr...
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...essary mean that they were reared by their parent than other adult of the village....
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...valid that the method that has been used is not also accurate. Actually, the meth...
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...d that the method that has been used is not also accurate. Actually, the method...
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...ondition that more details have been given to both reasearchers technics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, well, while, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 336.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8869047619 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7747583923 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488095238095 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.1936760123 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.833333333 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.70786347227 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 5.15768463074 407% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 35.0 5.25449101796 666% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140198521285 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554319599561 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381866448288 0.0701772020484 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0381579770565 0.128457276422 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411179592861 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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