the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
The author states that "the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition" which is debatable. Let us discuss this in detail. In any field when we have a sense of competition our work efficiency increases and also our brain starts thinking creatively in a zeal to be in the race. When we start working in such a environment our work will also lead to better and fruitful results. Also it would bring a sense of consiousness in the opponent and also helps them to perform better and deliver progressive results.
Having said that, when we work in a cooperative environment, we deliver resuts but not upto the mark. When you dont feel any sense of competition, mentally we come across a feeling of no competition and urge to be creative. Then our brain does not function upto the mark. For instance let us consider the corporate life of mnc"s (multi- national companies) where they live in a growing competitive world day by day which urges them to deliver the best results and products to the company. This creates an urge of working better to the other mnc and results in better products and market. Another instance, in schools and colleages we come across many competitions where all the students participate and compete one another. Why don't they conduct events with coperation rather that competition? The answer is pretty auster, when left in a pressuraized situation our brain starts orking very effeciently and performs the best. Consider the way any government works why do they have to divide into different poplitical parties and solve issues? Why cant they all be in one party and deal with the issues coperatively? Beacause that's not how the world operates. And compeitions exist in every field inorder to make your performance best.
As the apothegm says "every good thing has a bad thing", when we are in a competitve world we feel a sense of pressure. But inorder to perform the best when we come across a bit of pressure, we should learn to tackle such situations very craftily. Dealing with that pressure itself is the challenge thrown. When we handle such typical situations we learn to deal any situation that might arise in future and challenge us. When we live in a competitive world we also come across great leaders who become a part of our glorified history and get named as world leaders. If left in a cooperative world there will be no new thoughts we go for the same old traditional methods to perform any activity in any feild.
In conclusion the authors claim about living in a cooperative world rather that a competitive one does"nt work practically. And contrasts with the real world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
...the race. When we start working in such a environment our work will also lead to ...
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Suggestion: Also,
...so lead to better and fruitful results. Also it would bring a sense of consiousness ...
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Suggestion: don't
... resuts but not upto the mark. When you dont feel any sense of competition, mentally...
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Suggestion: don't
...articipate and compete one another. Why dont they conduct events with coperation rat...
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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... with the issues coperatively? Beacause thats not how the world operates. And compeit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 474.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87552742616 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82562549036 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502109704641 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.3904606174 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.44 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.96 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.36 5.21951772744 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212556370191 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569625288759 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141681547926 0.0758088955206 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140010974723 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14478669832 0.0667264976115 217% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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