People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Without no doubt, I concur that nowadays people spend too much time on their personal entertainment instead of paying attention to activities they should carry out. Reasons to demonstrate this agreement are much, however, I elaborate some important issues in the following.
The first evidence is that people usually spend their most of the time for watching TV. Indeed, with the advent of technology, television has became a fantastic tool for spending time with it. Television has a lot of program for any range of people, from child to old. Moreover, the price of having a TV is cheaper to have for example a computer. This is why people prefer to spend their time wit TV programs.
On the other hand, doing what people should perform is usually hard. For instance, admitting to universities is not as easy as going to a park for example. You have to pass usually, depend on countries, an entrance examination and it is most of the time time-consuming and/or probably boring. Thus, although people know that going to a university or collage has more advantage for their future, they do not it.
Another reason that people choose performing enjoyment comes back from their characteristic. We know some people are lazy and do not like to do sophisticated activities. Such people absolutely do the easiest work. And due to their character, they prefer to carry out entertainment and so on.
To sum up my reasons and conclude, in my point of view people nowadays prefer to do personal enjoyment rather than important activities they should do, because of the new technology, laziness and their personal characteristic.
Witout no doubt, I agree that nowadays people spend too much time on their perdonal entertainment instead of paying attention to activities they should do. Reasons to imply this agreement are much, however, I elaborate some important issues in the following.
The first evidence is that people usually spend their most of the time for watching TV. Indeed, with the advent of technology, television has became a pupular tool for spending time with it. Television has a lot of program for any range of people, from childs to olds. In addition, the prie of having a TV is cheapper to have for example a computer. This is why people prefer to spend their time wit TV programs.
On the other hand, doing what people should perform is usually hard. For instance, going to universities is not as easy as going to a park for example. You have to pass usually, depend on countries, an entrance examination and it is most of the time timeconsuming and/or probably boring. Thus, altough people know that going to a university or collage is more helpful for their future, they do not it.
Another reason that people choos performing enjoyment comes back their caracteristic. We know some people are lasy and do not like to do sophisticated activities. Such people absolutely do the easiest work. And due to their character, they prefer to carry out entertainment and so on.
To sum up my reasons and conclud, in my point of view people nowadays prefer to do personal enjoiment rather than important activities they should do, because of the new thecnology, lasyness and their personal characteristic.
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- TPO 45: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they cast doubt on the specific points made in the reading passage. 3
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, no doubt, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1339.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 270.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95925925926 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81034001038 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577777777778 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1759243378 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6875 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384536265651 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122160488602 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116738473356 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22927278116 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0897612968498 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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