Do you agree or disagree: People should relax with the ways related to their hobbies and physical activities which are different with their work.
In recent years, it has been common for people to work about eight or nine hours a day during workday. People need to take a rest to have better mental and physical health. Some people support that people should spend their leisure time in things related to their work. Others people hold the opposite point. As for me, I think people should do something not related to their field to have a better relaxation. Here are the reasons.
To begin with, trying new matters would bring about more fun. In workdays, people have to do their work constantly. Programmers sitting in the front of their computer to write code day by day, bus drivers drive their bus in the same route repeatedly, and all sort of things. It seemed so dull for everyone. However, something new would give people a better feeling. Workers can get away their work field for a while, and they can enjoy themselves without facing the tedious job that they have to do. For example, I work in an Internet company, and my job is coding. Often what I do is writing similar files and solving the same problems. I get bored with it after about three months. To cope with this situation, I began to go to swimming every weekday, through doing that I get relax better. In addition, I become less bored with my job because the rest give me the time to adjust my attitude toward my job.
Second, people can make new friends in other fields when people relax with the ways unrelated to their work. It is helpful to enrich your experience of life. People spend most of their time with their colleagues around them. They have little time to meet other peoples in different fields in the company. So people can use the chance of having a rest to join the sports club or take part in a big party. Thus they can know some guys in different fields. By having a conversation with new them, people can get access to a lot of interesting things.
In a nutshell, for the reasons mentioned above, I think relaxing with activities different from work is an excellent way for people to spend their leisure time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, thus, while, as for, for example, i think, in addition, sort of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1702.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5752688172 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39215293254 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52688172043 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3100867529 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.08 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.88 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.12 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385355213254 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107245525643 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.098083408395 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262212297599 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240957983102 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.69 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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