Do you agree or disagree: People should relax with the ways related to their hobbies and physical activities which are different with their work.
It is not uncommon that modern people are fully occupied with their work with little time left for relaxation. Thus, during the precious limited spare time, it is said that they should do something related to their own hobbies and physical activities instead of things connected with their work anymore, which,I totally agree with and this standpoint will be illustrated by the following two aspects.
To begin with, never should we ignore the necessity of developing our hobbies and make them different from work. The so-called hobby means the consciousness tendency of a person striving for a specific thing or activity and consequently, gain pleasure or satisfaction from them, which results in the motivation of high work efficiency and quality. For example, a sports fan may forget about the trouble at work when immersing in the joy of his favorite team's championship. Similarly, a young man whose favorite is singing may feel stress-free after staying for several hours in Karaoke. Thus, on the one hand, it is a wise choice not to make hobbies as work, which would eventually lead to a dull and uninteresting life with the hobby being ruined in daily work. On the other hand, balancing the hobby and work well is of crucial significance to a person's life as the relaxation and pleasure gained from hobby provides impetus of high work efficiency.
Moreover, the fact that doing physical activities do good to a person's physical condition and mental state makes them a pivotal part of life apart from work. With increasingly significant pressure and heavy workload, it is, between times, reported that workers suffer from sudden death after excessively long working hours.Thus, physical activities, under this circumstance, seem irreplaceable in terms of strengthening working people's physique.In addition, it is proven by science that exercise, beyond making a person more fit, also brings out the release of endorphins,compounds that give the person a sense of well-being and satisfaction in the brain. Thus, instead of taking up more time, doing physical activities in spare time is complementary of work by activating and refreshing workers.
All in all, according to the aforementioned discussion, it is safely concluded that different from working, doing things related to hobbies and physical activities is a wiser approach for workers to relax.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, then, thus, well, apart from, for example, in addition, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1999.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 378.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28835978836 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98032047366 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 105.062150918 48.9658058833 215% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 166.583333333 100.406767564 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 20.6045352989 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8333333333 5.45110844103 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414696995101 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153916087822 0.076458572812 201% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102582863401 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259312486438 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11743002993 0.0645574589148 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 11.7677419355 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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