The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by wardiati on Thu, 09/05/2019 - 21:34

The bar chart provides information about the proportion of senior citizen in japan, Sweden and the United States during a century from 1940 to 2040. Overall, there is an upward trend in all countries and it is predicted that japan will rank first at the end of the period.

In the first year, the figure for senior citizen in japan was the lowest, and it stood at precisely 5% followed by a slight decrease of about 3% in 1960. Between 1960 and 1980, the number was unchange at around 3%, then it started to rise moderately in the following year. After which, it is predicted that the quantity will reach 10% along with a dramatic rise to the peak of a number of more than 25% in the final year.

The USA and Sweden began the period just below 10% (approximately 9% and 7% respectively). In the following 40 years, both countries increased markedly of about 15% and 14% each, then the share of Sweden surpassed that of America in 2000 (15%) before it rose significantly of about 20% in 2019. The number of Elderly people in Sweden is estimated to increase more than 25% in 2040, while the figure for the the USA will account just below 25%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 400, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... than 25% in 2040, while the figure for the the USA will account just below 25%.
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Line 9, column 400, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... than 25% in 2040, while the figure for the the USA will account just below 25%.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 938.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48803827751 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38941447367 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55023923445 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.7263628664 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.25 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.125 22.9334400587 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.23603664747 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0577132737854 0.215688989381 27% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0278385801374 0.103423049105 27% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362390473218 0.0843802449381 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.042745392015 0.15604864568 27% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266132468534 0.0819641961636 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 61.2550243902 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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