It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours
Nowadays, finding an appropriate and well-paid job is one of the critical issues for people, especially graduated. Everyone contemplate different factors for his or her ideal job. One of these factors that play a predominant role in individuals' decision is how much time or how many days they will spend in their work. Some people prefer to have a job with three days a week for log hors than have a job with five days a week for shorter hours. I, personally prefer to occupation where I work only three days a week for long hours, and I will elaborate on my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, people who has a job with fewer days but long hours would spend more times with their families and friends. Although having a job is very vital for ones to provide a comfortable environment for their families and themselves, there are also other factors that enhance the families comfortably. One of these issues is spending appropriate and reasonable amount of times with our families. So, If people have a four days free time, they will able to strengthen their rapport with their families. Furthermore, they can provide better circumstance for them by going to trip, playing with their kids, etc. On the other hand, people who have a job where they spend most of their days, they cannot provide aforementioned situation in a good manner. Thus, it can be easily concluded that the more free days, lead to more time with both our friends and our families.
Furthermore, person who spend three days a week for his or her job would start a new job in order to earn extra money. Nowadays, although there are a plethora of job positions for people, their salary that they get is not sufficient for fulfilling all their needs. Therefore, in most of the cases, ones strive to do other tasks along with their premier jobs. For instance, they use their cars to communicate passengers or work as a servant in restaurant, etc. It is obvious that if they have four days free time day they will earn much money by starting second part time jobs.
To wrap it up, I am of the opinion that three days job with long hours work has numerous advantages for people. Not only do they have more time to spend with their family, but also they can earn much money by taking a second job. It is highly recommended that people consider the benefits of fewer days’ jobs when they decide to take a job in a company.
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- TPO 8 - Integrated memoir that was written by Chevalier de Seingalt 80
- TPO 49 - Integrated writing 85
- TPO 44 Integrated Writing Task 65
- Extra 2- Integrated writing 3
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'contemplates'.
Suggestion: contemplates
... people, especially graduated. Everyone contemplate different factors for his or her ideal ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...iewpoint in the following paragraphs. Firstly, people who has a job with fewer...
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Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: there are other; there are also
...ment for their families and themselves, there are also other factors that enhance the families comfo...
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Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... families and themselves, there are also other factors that enhance the families ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th both our friends and our families. Furthermore, person who spend three days...
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Line 5, column 437, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s to communicate passengers or work as a servant in restaurant, etc. It is obviou...
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Line 5, column 568, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...will earn much money by starting second part time jobs. To wrap it up, I am of th...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y by starting second part time jobs. To wrap it up, I am of the opinion that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62237762238 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51217389002 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459207459207 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.7323674564 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.15 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.45 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380757734221 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134651620328 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109933645817 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283681258447 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105686206476 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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