Some people think that people should choose their job based on income in order to provide security for their family.Do you think money is important factor when choosing job?What other factors should be considered?

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Some people think that people should choose their job based on income in order to provide security for their family.

Do you think money is important factor when choosing job?

What other factors should be considered?

Submitted by SEFALI on Sun, 10/13/2019 - 23:41

IT IS TRUE THAT JOB ALWAYS GIVES A FINANCIAL STABILITY TO AN INDIVIDUAL AND THEIR FAMILY. FEW BELIEVE THAT SALARY SHOULD BE CONSIDER AS PART OF SELECTING CRITERIA WHEN SEARCHING FOR A JOB. THE FOLLOWING ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THAT MONEY IS NOT ALWAYS ESSENTIAL FACTOR DURING SELECTING PROCEDURE SPECIALLY FOR YOUR FIRST JOB OFFER. AND PERSON SHOULD LOOK FOR OTHER CRITERIA TOO LIKE, PASSION, INTEREST, WORK HOURS AND SO ON.

FIRST OF ALL, MONEY IS NOT IMPORTANT AS ALWAYS DUE TO VARIOUS REASONS. FIRSTLY, WHEN A PERSON IS LOOKING FOR A WORK AS ENTRY LEVEL THEN THAT TIME HE SHOULD CONSIDER THE OFFER AS AN OPPORTUNITY RATHER THAN LOOKING FOR WAGES. TO ELABORATE, WHEN YOU LOOK FOR PAY WHEN SELECTING WORK, PERSON WILL END UP WITH SEARCHING A JOB FOR LONGER PERIOD OF TIME BY WASTING THE PRECIOUS TIME. THUS IT IS DEPENDS ON THE POSITION YOUR ARE APPLYING FOR AND THE WORK TYPE. HOWEVER, IT IS TRUE THAT AFTER 1 YEAR OF EXPERIENCE YOU SHOULD GET A GOOD PAY WHEN APPLYING FOR HIGHER POSITION.

IN THE ADDITION TO THIS, THERE ARE SEVERAL FACTORS WHICH SHOULD BE IN CONSIDER FOR JOB SELECTION. THE PRIME FACTOR IS THAT ONE SHOULD LOOK FOR INTEREST AND PASSION FOR WORK. TO ILLUSTRATE, PERSON OFTEN ACHIEVE A LOT WHOSE WORK HAS DONE WITH INTEREST. AS A RESULT INCREASE THE CHANCE OF PROMOTION AND THEN AUTOMATICALLY ONE GETS A HIGHER PAY. FOR AN EXAMPLE ONE OF MY FRIEND WANTED TO WORK FOR A PART TIME JUST TO GAIN SOME KNOWLEDGE AND MAKE NEW FRIEND SO HE JOINED MCDONALDS RESTAURANT AS ENTRY LEVEL POSIITION AND WITHING 3 MONTHS HE BECAME A ASSISTANT MANAGER IN THE SAME STORE. THIS IS HAPPENED BECAUSE HE WAS VERY ENTHUSIASTIC AND HARD WORKING AND HAVE PERSONAL INTEREST IN THE FOOD CHAIN BUSINESS. HENCE, HE GOT SUCCESS.

TO SUM UP, OVERALL IT SHOULD DEPEND ON THE PERSON'S PERSONAL CHOICE BUT I BELIEVE IS THAT, WITH STRONG WORK ETHICS AND CURIOSITY TO LEARN MORE DEFINITELY GIVES YOU AN HIGHER PAY. BUT AT FIRST MONEY SHOULD NOT BE A FUNDAMENTAL NEEDS EXCEPT FOR NEEDY PEOPLE.

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Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'considered'?
Suggestion: Considered
...MILY. FEW BELIEVE THAT SALARY SHOULD BE CONSIDER AS PART OF SELECTING CRITERIA WHEN SEAR...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., WORK HOURS AND SO ON. FIRST OF ALL, MONEY IS NOT IMPORTANT AS ALWAYS DUE TO ...
^^
Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...EN YOU LOOK FOR PAY WHEN SELECTING WORK, PERSON WILL END UP WITH SEARCHING A JOB ...
^^
Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'PERIOD'.
Suggestion: PERIOD
... END UP WITH SEARCHING A JOB FOR LONGER PERIOD OF TIME BY WASTING THE PRECIOUS TIME. THUS IT I...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 381, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: THUS,
...D OF TIME BY WASTING THE PRECIOUS TIME. THUS IT IS DEPENDS ON THE POSITION YOUR ARE ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ERAL FACTORS WHICH SHOULD BE IN CONSIDER FOR JOB SELECTION. THE PRIME FACTOR IS ...
^^
Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...STRATE, PERSON OFTEN ACHIEVE A LOT WHOSE WORK HAS DONE WITH INTEREST. AS A RESULT...
^^
Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: PART-TIME
...E ONE OF MY FRIEND WANTED TO WORK FOR A PART TIME JUST TO GAIN SOME KNOWLEDGE AND MAKE NE...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, look, so, then, thus, except for, as a result, first of all, it is true, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1628.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65142857143 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44012211136 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542857142857 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6726556714 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4444444444 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4444444444 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2387598598 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887163588669 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727366453232 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163951784108 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592396363794 0.056905535591 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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