Some people think that people should choose their job based on income in order to provide security for their family.
Do you think money is important factor when choosing job?
What other factors should be considered?
Some workers and employees search for a job based on income and others depends on the experience, because each one think that the job is chosen will provide security for their family. I'll discuss both views and show other factors that should be considered.
From one side, these days a large number of people choose their job based on salaries, due to may factors that affecting their everyday life. First, one of the main reasons is the economic situation that each country is passing through. Jobs with good salaries, any person have the chance to save money for a better future or invest in a new business to increase his income. Second, several people believe that experience won't bring money to protect their families future or sitting behind the desk all day and your boss won't appreciate your work and you salary still low. For example, many companies ask for employees with more than 5 years experience, several apply for this position, but when they arrive to negotiating in salaries, money wise is too low, therefore man prefer to gain money instead of experience.
On the other hand, many people think that more experience then can gain at early stage the more money can earn after. Some believe that profit can be done with time and working hard to reach high level of experience. Others prefer to start any job with any salary in order to shelter their kids and meet their needs, and by sharing love, respect and trust between one family. However, several people think that following their jobs and trying to spend more time to gain experience will keep them away from their family, will lead to lose and disintegration. For example, in my country there is two types of people rich and poor, the poor people all they care about is to work anything where they can feed their kids, even if they work more than 10 hours a day in order to meet their educational and daily needs.
As a conclusion, for some people, providing safety can be done by money an others think that gaining experience will secure their lives. In my opinion, both point of views can lead to a secure family, where they can live a proper way without facing difficulties and based on love and hope.
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2018-03-19 | Rajdeep Kaur Grewal | 78 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'll'?
Suggestion: I'll
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
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Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an other' or simply 'others'?
Suggestion: an other; others
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, therefore, for example, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68311688312 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25132632709 2.80592935109 80% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52987012987 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.2482951434 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.785714286 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92857142857 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.408799400938 0.244688304435 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136449865867 0.084324248473 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915380633271 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261069538103 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0830667207408 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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