Many people think that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree/disagree?
With the virtual omnipresence of advertising, opinions have diverged on whether or not the government should prohibit commercials targeted at children. However, I am for the idea of banning those advertisements due to their potential adverse impacts.
It is undeniable that commercials directed at young children are considered unethical and should be strictly restricted. It is understandable that advertisements commonly give products an exaggerated account, which makes people tend to completely believe in the power of the products. The advertising company mainly stresses on those attributes of a product in order to be attractive to young consumers and deliver a strong message that is what their peers also want and buy. As a result, young children are susceptible to the effect of commercials, leading directly to their subsequent buying decision.
Notwithstanding, there are bound to be those who doubt this idea. Many people argue that commercials directed at children can provide parents as well as their offspring with the useful information of a product that is good for them. A case in point is that after watching an advertisement for milk, young children would be interested in that product and want to drink more milk, then parents do not waste time convincing them. Nonetheless, children are easily taken advantage of since they have not yet acquired enough knowledge and experience. They may not be able to differentiate the quality of the products or even take into consideration the functions or practical values. Therefore, commercials would make the young become discontent with what they have already owned and put pressure on their parents to buy the advertised product.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that advertisements targeted at children can provide adverse impacts so they should be prohibited for the sake of the young.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41780821918 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12965547389 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565068493151 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9496679518 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.692307692 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4615384615 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23076923077 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228754956016 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842708781908 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472648348155 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150809603317 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249775242619 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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