Some people believe that media should allowed to publish information about the private lives of famous people. Others say that everybody has a right to privacy and this practice must be controlled or even stopped. Discuss both views.
Nowadays, many fans want to become the same the appearance of their idol. So, many people think that communication technology has access to the celebrity's personal rights. There are mixed opinions that everyone has equal rights to privacy even celebrities. In this essay, I will discuss comments above.
The people famous depend of media to take many their fans. In my opinion, popularity in society should go hand in hand with sharing what they do to society. In a different way, become celebrities need to have fans through something they loves. For example: favorite person have potential like good singing, beautiful makeup and skilled dancer. Fame will be compromised by being logged into privacy.
On the other hand, many people think that the worst thing is compromise on privacy. Because, everyone has their own secret meal, which requires absolute honey. If it is exposed they will receive criticism. That means they will feel pressured and may seek death especially famous people. They have to live a lot of their fans so their personal things are kept private.
In conclusion, celebrities need someone to love them by showing their talents and more than sharing their daily lives in the media. But, fans should know the privacy limits of favorite person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1075.0 1615.20841683 67% => OK
No of words: 209.0 315.596192385 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14354066986 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44617897544 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.66028708134 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 331.2 506.74238477 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.818767008 49.4020404114 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.1875 106.682146367 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.0625 20.7667163134 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130663399796 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449655737226 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395209414578 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828794371136 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0154529276466 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.64 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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