Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Celebrities play an important role in both national and international visage. Not only they followed by the people inside the country, but also the world looks to celebrities of a country to know about its people. Now the controversial question is that the opinions of famous people are more significant to younger people or the old one. Although some people are inclined towards the idea that all the people could be attracted to celebrities, I myself contend that celebrities are more important to young people. In what comes below, I will substantiate my viewpoints.
Firstly, young people are always looking for heroes and models during their life. since young people are in the first steps of their life, looking for some life patterns is one of the goals who they struggle with. Psychologists believe that as young people are flexible emotionally, they looking for individuals to treat like them or make their decisions based on them. As celebrities or athletes are famous in their countries or maybe all around the world, their opinion attracts people, but young people are more exposed to it. For instance, in my country, we have some famous athletes and celebrities who express their ideas toward politics and every issue in the country. There are lots of people who follow them on social media such as Instagram and always follow their challenges. As I mentioned that young people are flexible, they make their decision based on celebrities` idea. So famous people can change people`s decisions easily because they are in the showcase of society and many people look at them and their behavior and as we know young people are more exposed to this impact.
Furthermore, young people are more energetic and they are able to accept new opinions. The elderly people pass their long distances life with their own ideas and now they are less flexible to find new ideas to change their minds. The fresher mind of young people helps them to search and experience different ways for the rest of their life. They should experience more discoveries and opinions in order to shape their lifestyles. Now when some young follow celebrities` ideas, this can shape his mind to follow their dreams. For instance, I know a person who likes Mohammad Clay, the famous boxer, and he follows his matches and his opinion towards sport, he be motivated by his actions and however, he becomes a great boxer. Indeed, when a fresh mind finds a new way or idea it broadens itself for new experiences. So, celebrities are the ones who have the maximum effect on young people because people always look at them as role models.
In conclusion, the ideas of celebrities and famous people have a noticeable impact on young people more than old ones. As I mentioned, young people are more energetic to follow their ways and their favorites in order to shape their life and celebrities play significant roles for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Since
...or heroes and models during their life. since young people are in the first steps of ...
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Line 5, column 667, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...tches and his opinion towards sport, he be motivated by his actions and however, h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2424.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93686354379 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6402575571 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439918533605 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.0 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0101533 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.391304348 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.347826087 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180106864443 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732779291389 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490553985926 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144315080135 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391744960115 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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