In the modern era, elderly population is increasing. There has been a remarkable increase in the number of people who believe that this will lead to some problems, while another section of society thinks that older people play a crucial role in society. This essay will delve both sides of these views before drawing a reasonable conclusion. In my opinion, elderly people create problems, such as workforce and health care expenditures in their countries.
Admittedly, the negative implications of older population are often discussed in terms of two key areas, which are health care outcomes and the unemployment rate. Perhaps the main disadvantage of this is that expenditures of public health services might incrase because elderly people are more predisposed to serious diseases than young people. According to a report published by the New York Times, Germany spends most of their annual budgets on public health services owing to their old population. Secondly, the unemployment rate might increase in old populated countries because there are not enough job opportunities in order to hire young people. Thus, the government should be prudent concerning their population studies because old people might be perilous on both economy and employment rate in a country.
Despite these arguments, the positive aspects of old population, such as their traditions should not be underestimated. The primary benefits of this group is that they can reflect a country’s traditional culture thanks to their experiences. For instance, after decades of speculation historians now have fairly accurate information concerning World War II through old people. Furthermore, old people provide help not only information about history but also daily decisions, such as education, work, and even weather predictions. Hence, old population is important to society because they can easily cope with complex issues through their experiences.
In conclusion, the decision as to whether older population has an essential part of a society must be taken in the context of the entire society. However, my personal view is that this group causes some serious problems such as illnesses, which in turn leads to health expenditures.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, second, secondly, so, thus, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1884.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49271137026 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94192644259 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577259475219 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4405624773 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.75 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4375 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.3125 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281479873557 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825776719223 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736283215254 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175387501018 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110651301739 0.056905535591 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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