There is no gainsaying that technological progresses have improved means of communication which facilitate for human beings to know more and more about their all around. This matter instigates heated debate whether people should delicate their time for knowing about all events throughout the world or they should just concentrate about the events which are related profoundly to them. From my perspective, the latter option is more acceptable. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate my points of view.
First exquisite point to be mentioned is that managing time has a crucial role in human beings’ lives these days. Nowadays, most of the people are occupied and they work for hours during days. People especially in big cities waste a bit proportion their time in the traffic congestion when they are commuting. For example, when I was studied in university, I had enough time for following all political and social events throughout the world. In other words, I enjoyed knowing about the other countries’ news. After that I stated working as an IT programmer, I have not had enough time for even watching television. Therefore, it is undeniable that the great majority of people especially middle aged people do not have adequate time for knowing about events in other countries.
Second point that comes to my mind is that people who are able to concentrate on their works are more likely to be successful in their lives. Undoubtedly, people are curious about global events, but people know that the curiosity might distract them from their plans. It is obvious that people should just concentrate on their lives for achieving their goals. For instance, I never watch television when I have an important exam. For instance, last year I was studying hard passing the university entrance exam which is hold annually in my country, I just concentrated on studying materials and after one month, I Found that people revolted in some countries in Middle East.
Last but not least, events are not always attractive but they are bitter and unbearable. For example, some news about the war in some countries are too tragic and people cannot forget them easily. For example, once I was watching news and there were some movies about war in Syria, there were a lot of innocent kids who were killed or injured. I can never forget these scenes ant hey have had profoundly impact on me. Hence, some events are too bitter and they bother our soul and we should not follow them, especially when we cannot do anything for solving these problems.
In conclusion, contemplating all aforementioned paragraphs, there is no doubt that people should just concentrate on the related events rather than all events, because people not only have enough time these days but also are able to do their works more productively. Moreover, people are able to live more happily.
- TOEFL T P O 32 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO 47- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- TPO-32 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
- TPO 49- Independent writingDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. 70
- TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...do anything for solving these problems. In conclusion, contemplating all aforeme...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, moreover, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04842105263 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66949526805 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.9 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7440411741 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.260869565 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.652173913 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.39130434783 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0990844993751 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340721540792 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320855964193 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.06314422323 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035408998761 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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