TPO-28 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowedays, children are in a eclectic and various hazardous conditions. they' re really important for society because they will include the population in the future. some parents are quite caring about their dear kids' education. some others don't drasticaly care about this significant issue. I, personally speaking, feel that parents are much more involved in their children's education in these days than parents in the past. In what follows, the reasons supporting my viewpoint, are vindicated.
To begin with, as time went on, an important and worth considering thing related to parents which be enriched is their knowledge. On the other word, parents have been educated in these days more than past, and this causes them to identify the circumstances around their dear kids. Hence, they would promote and encourage to help their children's raising by having a great and close band with their school or their envoirnment which they connect to. To put it in a more vivid picture, my uncle is a civil engineer. he always concerned and worried about my cousins. Once, I asked him about his significant concern. he told me when he was reading an article about engineering problems, he found out the reason which made the engineers not to listen their adviser was that they had some problems in their educating process, so I don't want my kids will do as the same as they did in their job.
Furthermore, it would be helpful and efficient in their future life. Well educating would enable them to decide properly in the sensetive and dangerous situations. For instance, when I was at elementry school, I had a instructor who told me that it would be really secure in my important decisions if I had a back-up option. I supposed to contribute with one of gait analysis in Tehran, but it wasn't quite determined and distinct. so I wondered about another clinic to go there as an back-up option. Finally, it could be useful, and I coosed the second option.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned reasons, in my book parents pay more attention in their kids' education. that's because of deciding correctly and parent's knowledge.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
Nowedays, children are in a eclectic and various hazardous conditio...
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Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...ectic and various hazardous conditions. they apos; re really important for society b...
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Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...l include the population in the future. some parents are quite caring about their de...
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Line 1, column 240, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
... about their dear kids apos; education. some others don apos;t drasticaly care about...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helping'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: helping
...Hence, they would promote and encourage to help their children apos;s raising by having...
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Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
... picture, my uncle is a civil engineer. he always concerned and worried about my c...
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Line 3, column 570, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...concerned and worried about my cousins. Once, I asked him about his significant conc...
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Line 3, column 619, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...sked him about his significant concern. he told me when he was reading an article ...
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Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
..., when I was at elementry school, I had a instructor who told me that it would be...
^
Line 5, column 438, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...n apos;t quite determined and distinct. so I wondered about another clinic to go t...
^^
Line 5, column 488, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...red about another clinic to go there as an back up option. Finally, it could be us...
^^
Line 7, column 124, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...ttention in their kids apos; education. that apos;s because of deciding correctly an...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, furthermore, hence, if, really, second, so, well, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89757412399 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66506085967 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56064690027 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.3138189571 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5238095238 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23427067454 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0718061184874 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793132887733 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15942457644 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762901293766 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.