TPO26 – Independent: A/D? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent's jobs than to choose jobs that very different from their parent's job.
There are lots of careers in this world which make the decision rough that which job is better to choose. I, personally speaking, am of the opinion that it is better for us to choose a job which is similar to our parents. In what follows, the reasons to support my viewpoint are vindicated.
The first and foremost reason that make me believe in this way is that we can use our parents' experiences. To make it clear, parents have been being in their vocation for many years, and having losts of efficient and helpful experiences is crysral clear. Hence, the children can utilize their knowledge of the considered occupation. they would make children aware of problems which they might face to. sometimes they can notice the children about occations they might have much more benefits and profites. As an example, my father have started my groundfather's job for six years as a farmer. he went to his office at the same time. he handled both jobs as well as he could. Once, when he wanted to put some plastics on the seeds to make them raise faster, my groundfather told him to do that work in the particular way he have always done. he described the reasons which are about the final products. my groundfather told my dad that with this approach he can have much more crops and yeids, in the similar to it happened.
Furthermore, if children decide to have a same vocation, it seems that the job would be a heritage occupation. To put it into a more vivid picture, when a job choose by a family in repititive ages, it makes the occupation as a heritage. In my opinion, it would make parents more happy and supportive. they would think that my children trust me and like my works in these years, so the children can depend on their helps when they need someone aware of the situations related to the job. To illustrate it, back to my instance, sometimes my father required more time to do his works in the office, that was the time that my groundfather helped my father in farm's activities.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned reasons into account, I believe that it is more efficient for children to choose their parent's vocation. this is because of using the parents' experiences and making them happy and saticfied.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, hence, if, so, well, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62216624685 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6085114989 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481108312343 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2287260774 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.380952381 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9047619048 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225952795811 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766440362133 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694630532295 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168457193427 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325490962171 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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