Archaeologists have long thought that an artifact called the pemchint was used by Dodecan people solely as a musical instrument. Pemchints consist of hollowed pieces of bone, shell, or wood that are tied together with long straps. When whirled in the air, the pemchints create pleasant tones. Until recently, pemchints were found only at locations known to be used for Dodecan rituals and celebrations. Additionally, they were always excavated in proximity to other musical artifacts. Recently, however, a pemchint was found along with Dodecan hunters' tools located miles from the nearest known Dodecan settlement, while no other music-related objects were found in the area. Clearly, then, the pemchint was used by Dodecan hunters, who most probably used the sounds to repel dangerous wildlife.
The passage here talks about an artifact called pemchint which was believed to be used as a musical instrument by Dodecan people because it was found at locations used for rituals. However this belief was changed when the archeologists had seen this artifact at a location where hunting happened.
As stated in the passage until the recent times the pemchint was found only near places where rituals happened. Just because it was found with hunter tools once doesnt mean it was used to repel animals, if it was used for hunting there would be pemchints at many places and archeologists would report several instances of pemchint at different hunter locations not at one place.
Often music is considered a stress buster. The artifact which was found may be was carried by one of the members so that they can play it while going to the jungle or while coming back from it.The jungles are generally far away from the living areas. In the journey they might feel a little bored or stressful so may be they carried it as a recreation.
Taking the the third fact into consideration where they had mentioned the use of pemchint as device to make sounds to repel dangerous animals, it wouldnt be possible to hunt if they make some sounds. At a hunting place they maintain as much as silence possible so that they do not disturb their targets. Small sounds will also alert the animals and they might run away. Even though there was a dangerous wildlife hunters will have other techniques to escape from them as it is their profession. Usage of sounds to scare the dangerous wildlife is not a reliable technique.
The reasoning could have been more cogent if they had shown instances of the artifact found in many hunter locations and stating reasons about how sounds will scare of the dangerous animals without alerting the targets they are hunting.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 321 350
No. of Characters: 1502 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.233 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.679 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.363 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.854 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.61 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 182, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...as found at locations used for rituals. However this belief was changed when the archeo...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...a location where hunting happened. As stated in the passage until the recent ...
^^
Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...use it was found with hunter tools once doesnt mean it was used to repel animals, if i...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 194, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...the jungle or while coming back from it.The jungles are generally far away from the...
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Line 9, column 314, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...ght feel a little bored or stressful so may be they carried it as a recreation. T...
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Line 13, column 8, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...carried it as a recreation. Taking the the third fact into consideration where the...
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Line 13, column 8, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...carried it as a recreation. Taking the the third fact into consideration where the...
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Line 13, column 147, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...e sounds to repel dangerous animals, it wouldnt be possible to hunt if they make some s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, third, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 320.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81875 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41673042301 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521875 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1376753814 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.615384615 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6153846154 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07692307692 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159362032288 0.218282227539 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582750985401 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714663739747 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0976219937935 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779170174185 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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