Some individuals are passionate about buying new electronic devices, such as smartphones and laptop. I believe this tendency has brought about many disadvantages for both people and the environment.
There are many reasons why purchasing up-to-the-minutes electronic products might have detrimental impacts on people's lives, with the most significant one being a lot of financial issues. Following the latest trends without spending money is impossible, when people try to keep pace with the state-of-the-art technology, they may be persuaded to use their credits and saves. Since new versions of electronic goods are produced almost every month if buyers tend to keep themselves up-to-date, they may easily get into huge debts. Such situations would be even more catastrophic for those who have family commitments as they may find themselves unable to meet their family needs. Moreover, when people change their smartphones and computers frequently, the old versions simply are thrown away, resulting in a larger amount of e-waste. The toxic materials of discarded gadgets, such as cadmium, would be indisputably harmful to the environment since they can easily release into bodies of water, soil and air, even if they are recycled properly.
Some may argue that buying new electronic devices is a positive tendency. The advocates of this idea emphasise the fact that people in such cases can benefit from the latest technology in their daily lives. For example, having a professionally-designed laptop which can run and perform the latest software would be a head start for its owners over their colleagues, leading to better work performance.
In conclusion, it seems to me that although in some rare situation people have to have the latest model of technology, say, smartphones which would be quite practical for them, other reasons for being updated would not satisfy the myriads of adverse consequences caused by changing election devices.
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- Some parents think children should have mobile phones, others disagree.Discuss both sides and give your opinion. 78
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...they are recycled properly. Some may argue that buying new electronic devices is a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42763157895 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05144033018 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621710526316 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.0387801388 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.5 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118831177403 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0545555836568 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461641837578 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872676866789 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432040288804 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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