Who influence more, family or friends?
Since the beginning of time, humans have needed a leader who can solve their problems and take a good decision in critical situations. In the past, one of the dominant features which a leader should have got it, was a vigor, and have an athletic body. With the passage of time, new problems appeared which to solve them, a leader have to have got an analyzing property and take a well decision. psychologists carried out studies recently revealed that some people were due to with leadership intelligence. The inevitable question which has always caused heated debate among academicians is that whether leadership intelligence can be learned. some people are inclining toward that this comes with you at the time of the birth whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. I agree with second group; you can learn everything if you want. In the following paragraphs, I will explicate through the most outstanding reasons, and I provide some details which can aptly elucidate my viewpoint.
The most prominent point to be mention is that leader talent has played a dominant and undeniable role in one's success. some psychologists contend that people are due to with all of the talents, but they boost some of them. Perhaps, they do not aware about themselves, or some situation to which they face, enhance specific their characters. In Sharif university of Tehran, one of the most prestigious university in our country, a very reliable research conducted recently and revealed everyone can boost their talents with training and practicing. The study encompassed the social, political, and economic situations of each student who they considered.
Another equally noteworthy point supporting my idea is that if you experienced some critical conditions in your job, even if you were an employee, you can use your knowledge to become a leader in your vocation. For instance, the founder one of the best chine restaurants in my country, called Pedar Khob, was a waiter and he helped their chief when he was an adolescent.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that we can elevate our characters and talents. there is a proverb which says there is a will there is a way. Sometimes some ones need more time to figure out and promote their intelligences, but in the end, he has got anything which he wants to have.
- TPO40Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think it is a good idea? 81
- Who influence more, family or friends? 3
- TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th 83
- In the past, it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. 81
- TPO 40- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 81
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, well, whereas, for instance, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07908163265 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81155202914 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545918367347 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5403075555 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.611111111 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0283836183097 0.236089414692 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0102742722401 0.076458572812 13% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0232523927463 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0191603343501 0.150856017488 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134728788465 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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