Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
In today sophisticated world, education plays a salient role in children's lives since it facilitates and paves the way for students' progress and success. For this reason, parents should pay more careful attention to their children's education. In this line if thought, some people believe that today parents are not involved in their children's education as much as parents were in the past, while many others hold the opposite view, stating that modern parents have more determined decisions in their children's education. I, personally, concur with the latter group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, today parents have greater impacts on children's education since they are more informed and knowledgeable than were parents in the past. In in the past, a large proportion of people were illiterate, and in many cases, children used to work with their family members in their farmlands instead of going to school and improving their knowledge. Since many parents were illiterate, and also that proportion of populations who were literate were not usually exposed to different instructive information during their lives, they had less knowledge about the importance of education. Therefore, not only did some parents take the education as a less important matter, but also many parents even did not allow their children to go to school and university. On the contrary, nowadays, higher proportion of the general public are literate individuals, and many of them have high-level academic degrees. In today modern era, parents respect and pay more attention to their children's education as they are more informative about the high importance of education.
Secondly, today parents have access to more technological equipment and facilities to help and be involved in their children's education. To elucidate this point, by development of technology, today people are provided with a rich diversity of facilities to improve the level of education. Parents use this equipment to enhance their children's education level, while these conditions were not available for parents in the past. For example, nowadays, parents provide the best study conditions for their children at homes or they enlist their children in some extracurricular activities, which improves their children's skills and competence in their course materials, such as private in-home tutoring service. As a result, today parents interfere more in children's education since they have access to high technological equipment.
In conclusion, nowadays, parents have greater influence on their children's education. Not only toady parents are more knowledgeable, but they also have access to more advanced and technological facilities to affect their children's education.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement All university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is 82
- TPO 53 Task 2 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. 68
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: In
...edgeable than were parents in the past. In in the past, a large proportion of people ...
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Line 3, column 816, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...ary, nowadays, higher proportion of the general public are literate individuals, and many of t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in many cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 8.0752688172 372% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2368.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53271028037 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89333855316 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448598130841 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 750.6 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.9331773998 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.294117647 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1764705882 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.17647058824 5.45110844103 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1053958243 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500726819729 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280519180596 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0771849691991 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0156635698669 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 58.1214874552 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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