Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advertise made much influence in our life. Some people I sure believe that Television advertising directed towards young children they should not allow to watch them, others would disagree. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that young children should not allow to watch them. I feel this way for the following reasons, which I will develop in the subsequent paragraph.
To begin with, It might heart children. They strongly believe that whatever showing in the advertisement is right and they try to copy and they might heart themself. For example, I remember when I was a child there was an advertise of cookie. It was showing in the advertise that is we eat that cookie we will become strong and powerful, they use supermen character to promote this product and he use to eat this cookie and was so strong that he can jump from high, from the car. Children did believe that and they started to copy that and many got heart. This add was so viral and many children got a heart because they try to copy that advertisement. As a result, the government bends this add. As you can see, because of misleading information about the advertisement there is a chance that children will heart themself.
Moreover, children believe in false information. The company uses false information to promote its product. For instance, there was a protein bar advertisement. It was showing that if we eat that we will get all the nutrition we need. My nice started to believe that and he won't eat anything except that bar. He was so convinced that whatever nutrition he wants he will get from that protein bar. He was so overwhelmed by this false information. This example taught me that sometimes children started to believe in wrong message.
In summary, while various perspectives and viewpoints on this issue exit, I am absolutely convicted that children are not allowed to watch an advertisement. Not only they might heart themself but also they believe in false information
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 153, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'watching'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: watching
...ds young children they should not allow to watch them, others would disagree. As far as ...
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Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'watching'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: watching
...ve that young children should not allow to watch them. I feel this way for the following...
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Line 5, column 220, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...I remember when I was a child there was an advertise of cookie. It was showing in the advert...
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Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... advertise of cookie. It was showing in the advertise that is we eat that cookie we will beco...
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Line 5, column 398, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...haracter to promote this product and he use to eat this cookie and was so strong th...
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Line 5, column 398, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...haracter to promote this product and he use to eat this cookie and was so strong th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in summary, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85545722714 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7252550486 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463126843658 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.5598099315 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.8181818182 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4090909091 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102110765272 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0376503608796 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472414024596 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0725723955281 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642081914448 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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