The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends
It is clear that happiness is one of the most important needs of all human being throughout life. In this regard some people may hold the opinion that maintain friendships with a small number of people is more important for happiness than the ability to make many friends while some others may hold the opposite point of view. We need to closely look at the maintain friendships and make many new friend for happiness and then drawn conclusion. Even then, it may not be to totally agree or disagree with the statements. It may depend on whether a person prefers to maintain friendships with small number of people or make many new friend. However, all in all, I am one of those who believe that make many new friends is more important for happiness. There are many reasons to support my point of view and I would like to mention a few of most important ones where are as follows :
First, considering the fact that the humans are different, the living condition of different individual are different. So if someone decides to migrate, they have to make new friends in the new place, in fact after awhile due to absence of old friends their role is decrease. For example, when I went to Tehran I made new friends there because many of my old friends were not there and I needed new friends to spend time with. Therefore, people need new friends at different times and places.
Second, humans are social beings and in order to live in this world they have to learn various knowledge of everything. Since different people have different knowledge and ability, so those who have more friends not only can learn more thing but also they are more successful in their life. For instance, recent research suggests that people who have more friends have been more successful in their lives and more advanced in their work. Thus, having more friends will increase the information of people.
As an English proverb goes, “a coin has two sides”, those who believe that maintain friendships with a small number of people are partially that reasonable that unlike make more new friends, because in difficult time they are more trustworthy. Thus it can has some benefits. Nevertheless, with the facts that I outlined above, I still believe that make more new friends is more important.
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- TPO 49 Integrated Writing Task 85
- In order to be well informed a person must get information from many different news resources 60
- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 70
- The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends 61
- Task 1 tpo 22 85
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... opinion that maintain friendships with a small number of people is more important for happiness ...
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Line 1, column 355, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...int of view. We need to closely look at the maintain friendships and make many new friend fo...
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Line 1, column 881, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...st important ones where are as follows : First, considering the fact that the hum...
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Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: FOR_AWHILE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a while'?
Suggestion: a while
...friends in the new place, in fact after awhile due to absence of old friends their rol...
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Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
... believe that maintain friendships with a small number of people are partially that reasonable th...
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Line 7, column 255, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...fficult time they are more trustworthy. Thus it can has some benefits. Nevertheless,...
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Line 7, column 267, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
... they are more trustworthy. Thus it can has some benefits. Nevertheless, with the f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7803030303 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48661690779 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472222222222 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5561063045 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.352941176 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2941176471 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476037850294 0.236089414692 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159228354641 0.076458572812 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119999842737 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276910115818 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129287159544 0.0645574589148 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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