The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales( in various formats) of film from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar graph provides information about the rentals and sales of different products (VHS, DVD, and Blu ray) from a specific store from 2000 to 2011.

Overall it can be clearly seen that, in initial year, there was the highest number of rentals, whereas the sales of formats lowest in annual number in the same period.

it is crystal clear that, in the starting 2 years the number of rentals was approximately similar which was around 175,000, was going to downward trend constantly and till the year of 2011, it remained nearly one third (55000) of the period of 2002.

Moving further, the demand of VHS format was more than 80,000 in numbers over the period of 2002, dropped dramatically after one year and recorded as over 60,000 followed by DVD products which were sold in the number of less than 50,000, increased sharply and crossed the data of 100,000. However, from 2002 to 2006 there was no demand of blu-ray format, but in the same period above 200,000 DVD players had been sold which started decreasing from 2008 and remained exact 180,000 in numbers till the last year, whilst there was nominal sale of blu-ray format in the same period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: BLU_RAY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'Blu-ray'?
Suggestion: Blu-ray
...les of different products VHS, DVD, and Blu ray from a specific store from 2000 to 2011...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...in annual number in the same period. it is crystal clear that, in the starting ...
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Line 7, column 340, Rule ID: BLU_RAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Blu-ray'?
Suggestion: Blu-ray
...rom 2002 to 2006 there was no demand of blu-ray format, but in the same period above 20...
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Line 7, column 545, Rule ID: BLU_RAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Blu-ray'?
Suggestion: Blu-ray
... year, whilst there was nominal sale of blu-ray format in the same period.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, third, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 961.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75742574257 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2130927747 2.65546596893 83% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594059405941 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 22.4926829268 178% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.3520350973 43.030603864 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 192.2 112.824112599 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.4 22.9334400587 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.23603664747 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15872041259 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104168404572 0.103423049105 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426698118432 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114937865163 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397196799483 0.0819641961636 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.2 13.2329268293 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.26 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.22 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.4329268293 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.9970731707 164% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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