successful people try new things and take risks rather than doing what they know how to do well.
I agree with the idea that successful people try new things and take risks rather than doing what they know how to do well. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, taking risks and experiencing new things are a way to succeed. Successful people are not afraid of losing or failing. That is why they try anything even if it costs them a lot. Drawing from my experience, whenever I want to apply for a new job there is a voice that does not let me do it and is afraid of failure. However, when I go for it and get that job then I understood that it was only a step away from me. It is certainly clear to see why people should take risks in order to be a successful person.
Secondly, taking risks and trying new things makes life interesting. There are so many activities, places, and the jobs that people do not want to do or go because they are happy with their current situation. However, they get tired of doing the same thing all the time. Drawing from my own experience, I was living in Kabul and did not travel to any other country because it is wrong in our culture if a girl travels alone. However I got risk and traveled to Bahrain for a week. Moreover, I found so many new friends. I met many successful entrepreneurs and learned a lot from their experience. Now I am back to Kabul and I use the experience I got from there and I am so happy that I went there. For this reason, trying new things and taking risks is habit of successful people.
To conclude, I agree that successful people take risks and try new things. This is because taking risk is a way to succeed, besided, trying new things makes life interesting.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 426, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...in our culture if a girl travels alone. However I got risk and traveled to Bahrain for ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, i feel, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.30529595016 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46850484569 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476635514019 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 424.8 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8918226905 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.7368421053 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8947368421 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.521984833026 0.236089414692 221% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163176947196 0.076458572812 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.192312106154 0.0737576698707 261% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.369239132123 0.150856017488 245% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143859102791 0.0645574589148 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.42 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.4 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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