The bar graph shows the number of people employed in different workplaces in one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The bar graph compares and contrasts data on the change in the number of employees in the 5 different departments of an area in Australian continent for two years with a difference of nine years.
In an overview, there is a slight rise in the figures of employees in three departments (sales, computing and nursing), whereas two departments (accounting and farming) shows a gradual decline.
Firstly, the sales department, which had the maximum number of employees in both the years, in 2001 it had 1,80,000 staff members and by 2008 it reached to an approx value of 1,90,000. Similarly in the computing and nursing department, the employee count was 1 lakh and 40,000 respectively, and by 2008 it grew to a near value of 1,10,000 and 50,000 respectively. All these departments showed a increase of 10,000 members.
Secondly, The accounting department , which had about half the number of employees when compared to sales department, witnessed a decrease of about 10,000 employees in eight years and reached to 80,000. Even, the farming department, which had the least number of employees, saw a fall of staff by 10,000, and reached the lowest count of only 20,000 representatives
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 186, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...reached to an approx value of 1,90,000. Similarly in the computing and nursing department...
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Line 5, column 394, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...pectively. All these departments showed a increase of 10,000 members. Secondly...
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Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
.... Secondly, The accounting department , which had about half the number of empl...
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Line 7, column 288, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...least number of employees, saw a fall of staff by 10,000, and reached the lowest ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, similarly, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 990.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07692307692 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97607774325 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.9951195281 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.428571429 112.824112599 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8571428571 22.9334400587 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.23603664747 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0784934471855 0.215688989381 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450280556304 0.103423049105 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358607634192 0.0843802449381 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0579088824373 0.15604864568 37% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409677608115 0.0819641961636 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.2329268293 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.4329268293 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.0658536585 154% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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