After working in your department for over 3 years you feel the need to switch your department Write a letter to your boss requesting a change in the department In the letter mention Why do you want to switch departments Which department would y

Dear Sir,

I am XYZ, employee of your esteemed organization and working in loan processing department from last three years. In the last three years I have been working as a loan processinng officer, disbursing loan files and adhering TAT for customer delight. I have achieved all my key performance area throughout the tenure.

By continuously doing monotonous job, it has made me idle and affecting my performance. I do not feel excited at all on my work. I think i should change the department and switch to some other challenging job within the company. I have searched for customer service department and found that it would be a challenging job for me. While serving customers i will have to resolve different kind of issues daily. Each customer has a different kind of query and issue so it would be an enthralling experince while working as customer relationship manager. My previous experience of customer service will be an extra advantage for me.

I think switching within department would not affect my career goals and it will help me to continue my job within the company. I request you to please help to approve this inter department transfer. I will be deeply obliged.

Your's sincerely
XYZ

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 138, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...feel excited at all on my work. I think i should change the department and switch...
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Line 5, column 230, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...her challenging job within the company. I have searched for customer service depa...
^
Line 5, column 331, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t it would be a challenging job for me. While serving customers i will have to resolv...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ing job for me. While serving customers i will have to resolve different kind of ...
^
Line 7, column 201, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...approve this inter department transfer. I will be deeply obliged. Yours sincer...
^
Line 10, column 4, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... deeply obliged. Yours sincerely XYZ
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while, i think, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1019.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 205.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97073170732 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87815626091 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585365853659 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 309.6 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8207372121 44.8134815571 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.7857142857 76.5299724578 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6428571429 16.8248392259 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.21428571429 4.34317383033 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241657338573 0.216113520407 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0857425776447 0.0766984524023 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758796337124 0.0603063233224 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157443223956 0.12726935374 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304623526967 0.0580467560999 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.