Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Others prefer to live their life with their families for a long period of time. Which of these situation is better? Why? Use specific examples and points to explain your essay.
Children’s transition to adulthood is challenging for both parents and children. I believe that parents should let their young adults live independently to attend college and work. It will help them to learn their responsibilities: managing finance, controlling stress, and building relationships with others.
First, money can be a difficult topic for many people to talk about, but it’s critical that young adults develop the ability to handle money independently. If they stay with their parents, then they will always be dependent on their parents when they face any financial problems. All adults should learn to make appropriate purchases within their financial means because it is essential that young adults learn saving money.
Second, Americans are more stressed than ever, and learning to navigate that reality is an important skill for all young adults moving towards independence. While money, work, relationships, and prospects for the future can all cause anxiety, learning one’s own triggers and how to cope with them is a highly individualized process. Learning to address the actual causes of stress and how to cope with stress in a healthy way is a critical skill for young adults. When young adults are away from home and their parents, then they will be out of their comfort zone. At this point, they will get a chance to learn how to control stress by themselves.
Lastly, strong social bonds have been found to be closely linked to longevity, but newly independent adults can find it challenging to make and maintain friendships once they are no longer in school with their peers. If young adults live by themselves and away from their parents, then they learn to make connections with other people. Learning to seek out like-minded people, such as by joining a book club, volunteer organization, faith community, or other special interest groups. In an age of digital communication, developing real-world friendships can be extra challenging, which is all the more reason to think about making friends as a skill to be developed, rather than a “natural” side effect of just being in the world.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young adults should be independent way from parents because it provides them opportunities to learn how to balance their finances, control stress, and make bonds with other people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd building relationships with others. First, money can be a difficult topic fo...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to save'.
Suggestion: to save
...it is essential that young adults learn saving money. Second, Americans are more st...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a healthy way" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...s of stress and how to cope with stress in a healthy way is a critical skill for young adults. W...
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Line 7, column 133, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
...ependent adults can find it challenging to make and maintain friendships once they are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, second, so, then, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23482849604 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8570605078 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532981530343 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7702427642 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6875 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4375 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246409031818 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101588197724 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731264201461 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171078865173 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294076165419 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.