Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Educating children is one of the most important tasks of schools and teachers. Children are cornerstones of every society, and if they are educated properly, the future of that society will be guaranteed. While some think that because of these new technologies that children have access to, it is harder to teach them, others believe otherwise. As far as I am concerned, I totally believe that educating children is more difficult now than it was in the past, thanks to cell phones and other digital equipment. The reasons why I think so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, children cannot fully concentrate on their education nowadays. In the past, children spent their off-school times playing with their friends or doing sports like football or basketball in their backyards. When they came to school, they had nothing else to think about. In contrast, today's children spend much of their time on the internet with their cellphones or playing online games and social media. They bring their cell phones to school and are always concerned with them. It is like they are online 24 hours a day, and it is all they think about. They have online friends, or maybe boyfriends or girlfriends. It always occupies their minds even when they are in schools. For instance, children now use the Instagram app on their phones to connect and be in touch with their friends. When they are in school or at home, or even in their bed, they are checking Instagram and messaging there. Nevertheless, in the past, there were no such problems. When children were at school, they had nothing other than their education to think about.
Second, many children now think that they do not need teachers anymore. Nowadays, children have access to many online educational sources, and they can use them even by use of their cell phones. Some of those sources are widely accepted and very popular, and children think they are much better than their own teachers. As a result, they do not pay attention to class or even hardly attend school. My own experience demonstrates this reality. About twenty years ago, when I was in school, our teachers were the only source for learning, so we paid as much attention as we could to learn. Even some of my classmates wrote whatever the teacher was saying because they did not want to miss anything. On the other hand, my younger brother is going to middle school now. He has a cell phone, and through that phone, he has found great online sources about his lessons. Therefore, he hardly goes to school, and only goes to talk to his friends or play games with them.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that teaching children in the past was much easier than it is today. Not only children had fewer distractions back then, but also the teachers were the only source to learn school courses, so children closely paid attention.
- TPO 42 Integrated Writing Task 70
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 241, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to school'
Suggestion: to school
... teachers were the only source to learn school courses, so children closely paid atten...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, then, therefore, while, even so, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79759519038 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45079447295 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478957915832 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.5514228997 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5517241379 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2068965517 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.24137931034 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295330756869 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849598875939 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540316137866 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188752879473 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0230094436775 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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