TPO 53 Writing IndependentDo you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation

In today's modern world, governments have a limited amount of money, and they should spend it as efficiently as possible, considering the priorities. While some believe that Internet access is more critical than public transportation, others believe otherwise. As far as I am concerned, improving public transportation throughout the country has a greater significance in comparison to access to the Internet. The reasons why I think so will be elaborated upon hereunder.

First of all, it will be very beneficial for the government if people have access to public transportation. Since producing or importing fuel is very expensive, the government pays quite a lot of money for fuel subsidies. It stands to reason that if people use their own vehicles, they will need a significant amount of gas or gasoline every day. Therefore, the government should provide more fuel, so spend more money. On the other hand, if people have access to adequate public transportation, they obviously do not need to use their cars. About twenty people can be carried around the city or even between cities with one bus. Consequently, the fuel assumption will be much lower, and the government can save quite a lot of money.

Second, by using public transportation, the environment will be healthier, which will benefit the government. If people use their vehicles, the traffic in the cities will get worse, especially in city centers. This traffic will severely pollute the air, and the noise will be intolerable. Many of the people who live in cities will get sick and need medical care. As a result, the government has to spend a lot of money on peoples' health and their remedy. They should build more hospitals and infirmaries and hire more doctors and nurses. These tasks can be very expensive. In contrast, if the government provides effective public transportation, the traffic will be better, and the city environment will be healthier. Therefore, the government has to spend less money on peoples' cure.

In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that the government should spend more money on improving effective public transportation rather than Internet access because it will be much more beneficial for the government.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, as to, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18131868132 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00117716308 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475274725275 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.3293425726 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8095238095 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.80952380952 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237612797406 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0823904534425 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850581527389 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20435627821 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0959614062893 0.0645574589148 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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